Poetry / On Angel's Wings

This is a very touching tribute
this is excellent:
“You shed your earthly temple
You have wings to gently glide
Throughout the hearts, the thoughts
the lives of those you left behind ”
How sad it is, the end of life.
I have recently lost someone
and this gave me comfort.. thank you..
great job

I really enjoyed this piece. I think that you were very descripitve and it flowed very easily. I also think that you have a great beginning to an even greater piece. I think that if you tried to add something here and there this would be an outstanding piece. I think its good how it is though, but I can definately see potential for more!

Hi, first of all I would like to say that I really enjoyed your piece.  I think it is a subject that is completley relatable and never loses value.  Over all a good start.  My only critisim is that some of the language, particularly the last lines, are a bit cliche.  What I mean is a good poet finds a way to make a widly used topic novel.  I think you have good stuff here and I hope this was helpful.

My dearest wishes and prayers are with you. As far as the poem goes it truly mystical. I like you word play and your discriptions. I don’t think anybody with a heart can truly critique this in a negative manner, I mean not to mention this was based on genuine feelings.

I thought that the opening five lines were a little awkward because of the formal choice of words that doesn’t carry though out the piece. I like the middle though, the flow of rhymes had a good balance. Although, towards the end, that balance wavered a bit for me because of the repetition of sound in the last three lines. Overall, I like the context of your poem and think you have potential and talent!

<3 KK

I really liked this poem.  I did have to read it twice to get the flow of meaning, I think due to the speech marks ending what was being said at … to be”.  Second time round it was easy to read and I liked the way one line led so smoothly into the next.  A poem of hope and comfort.

I was almost swayed away from reviewing this poem because of how many goals you put. You may get more reviews if you listed less.

“beat of a heart I hear” really like this line. Great assonance.

The first thirteen lines are really fantastic. Then you get a bit cliched (I hope you don’t take too much offense to this, considering how personal I know the poem is to you). Mainly the “tears will flow like rivers” ” losing a dear loved one” and “all is not in vain.”

Good job though. I would have cried after hearing it at the funeral.