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So, I recently had two new roommates move in. Two chicks. It’s been a long time since I’ve lived with girls. It’s not as bad as a I thought it could be. Just that I realized that sometimes guys, who are notorious for not being clean and tidy (sorry, guys), can be cleaner and tidier than women. The girls have now been here for two months, but neither seem to be a big fan of unpacking their boxes or cleaning, and our place still looks like they JUST moved in.

I guess it’s partly my own fault, because in my posting on Craigslist, I said I wasn’t looking for clean-freaks. I didn’t realize those words would attract all the people who hate to clean. I mean, after all, I never thought of myself as a clean freak. Until now. My last roommate, the clean freak, who prompted me make a point to say I wasn’t look for another one, was seriously obsessive.

Brad:
(While vacuuming) Oh hey. So the cleaning lady is coming in an hour. It’ll be about $25 each. Cool?

Me:
(Confused) Uh… ok.

Brad vacuumed, mopped, scrubbed, wiped all the way until the cleaning lady came. Then, the cleaning lady (who probably thought we must have way too much money to throw around if we hired her to clean a place that was already clean), vacuumed, mopped, scrubbed, wiped, and left. Meanwhile, I was out chain-smoking on the patio, drinking my coffee, reading my book, basking in the sun. When I came back inside, Brad was again vacuuming. When he saw me, he smiled and said:
Didn’t she do a great job?

Me:
(Confused) Yeah…

That was one extreme. This is definitely the other. My new roommate, Renu, said she thought it would only take one of us to clean the entire place in two hours, tops. I looked at her incredulously, and said:
Ummm… I don’t know about you, but it would take me two hours just to clean the kitchen.

Renu just looked at me, and I suddenly realized, to her, I was Brad.

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RoadHousePress avatar General Stranger

November 12, 2007

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You have a great beginning for a short story. Use your imagination and expand this into more.  Fictionalize if you must, but write this.  Roommate stories are always fun to read.  

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October 29, 2007

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itacaregaucho reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Nice tale.It’s nice flow. I can not write about grammar because I’m rookie in English (I dont understand some words like “Craigslist”)
I love a “The end”! Keep writing!

jadecat avatar General Stranger

October 27, 2007

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This was interesting, but it ended too soon.  I’d like to hear more of the escapades of the neat and not-so-neat.  I loved that last sentence.  Made me laugh out loud!  :D

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