Poetry / Behold The Rembrandt

I thought it was quite good; however, I failed to see the connection between The Night Watch and animals.  I understood that you felt that your painting could not compare to the sheer genius of a master.  I can also understand the feeling of euphoria after seeing astounding art.  I also understand poetic artistry but not at the cost of loosing the audience. In the first sentence I felt you could leave off the ‘of’ at the end of the line and not loose the flow into the second line.  Two “ofs” threw it off. Do not take me wrong; I marked you high because I felt the excitement and enjoy that you sought to envoke in the reader.  Thank you for sharing.

If a reviewer understands the world of art as I do, they would appreciate your referals to the zoo…profound indeed, but someone who doesn’t understand the catching of a moment may not catch the drift of your poem…personally I enjoyed it…

Ok this great I like the fact that you did it for/about someone you look up to

OK, I understand your point about free verse, but that does NOT mean I can’t argue for your writing lines that contain an entire thought, action, or image, to whit: “Voyaging among the abundant array of©reations of humanity[,]”.

It seems to me that there is a stanza missing here because I can’t imagine the persona getting horny over the “Night Watch.”  Should mention be made of other more erotic works?

The zoo business confuses me: do you mean a real zoo, or the world-outside-the- museum as zoo?

Typo:I think you mean than when you type then.

The line “Far told more” is confusing; do you mean “Foretold more”? If so, you would need to eliminate the word “At” at the beginning of the previous line.

One last thing: unless you publish this with a copy of the “Night Watch” for the reader to see, there will always be something missing in the reader’s experience.  

I DID enjoy this, despite all my comments!  It raises a good point about divine versus human inspiration and talent.

It sounds to me like one of those magazine clipping poems, where you clip completly random words and through them all together, in your case it works. i like the zoo hopping, im not sure what you meant by that, but to me it felt like you were somewhat calling everyone animals, either way, poetry is meant to be heard and i enjoyed it.

Very. . .strange. May I ask what exactly is is about?

Very uniquely creative. Not sure of your implied intent, are you suggesting that the occupants of this world are inherently wicked and are not worthy occupants of this world?  Or, maybe God should have consulted with Rembrandt Harmenszoon van Rijn before creating mankind?
Very impressive work.
Thanks for sharing
Mike