Poetry / Within
Where the weather is paralyzed and the lights remain undimmed,
I find a place where nothing is within.
Surrounded by the spoils of man I stand upon a hollow ground
and hear the echoes of feet marching all around
The thunder of the busy life cannot sustain or quite suffice my
desire to remain among a land so saturated of villainous vice
I walk to the street in the stream of a crowd
whose anthem bellows a thousand paces loud
atop the ground, throughout the dancing dust
where I wish not to walk, but I must.
And my feet echo in the chorus as a tenor in the spiraling song,
a hypnotic melody, a dizzying rhyme of rhythm and reason
that has gone on far too long.
I study their faces and count all their paces
The shadows of folks who are finding their places
Mixing and meshing on the warm sunny street which will soon be cool
because the heat will retreat
when the sun hits the road to define a different beat.
But I stop and I think in the sum of a blink
That all the world is just a trick to keep your eyes on
A fool’s jest, or a circus at best where the only way to stay is to keep your disguise on
Yet the comfort in charge is that the world is large, too large to put a price or a prize on
Because somewhere today to a man far away
Our troubles are just a distant horizon
And our shadows are bound to be level with the ground
All faceless and spaceless, of grace without sound
As selfless as the ocean, as humble as a plant
Who we wish we could be, but we can’t.
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Stunning for a “one sitting blurt”. Well, stunning anyway – lots of good imagery and very imaginative structure. I am often intrigued by people who can find the energy to feel and to write good poetry about things other than loss and break-ups (I do it myself). This seems very introspective and personal, like the reader is allowed access to your thoughts, but your feelings are one layer beneath that, so it leaves so work for the reader – in other words, it is thought provoking.
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Normally, I am very against rhyming poetry, but you managed to pull this piece off rather well. You have some crafty imagry that carries the readers intrest, something that is important. I especially liked the first and last stanza.
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