Lyrics / A Note

First off, there is a very slim you or any of us will attract an agent here on urbis. Its not so much a flaw of our writing but its more to do with the fact that there are probably no agents that go around urbis looking for talents.
Your lyrics are nice, if not too melanchonic. What I would suggest is to adda bridge to add variaty to them. Something that will completly change the flow of the music and catch the listener uprepared. Also maybe you mgiht want to put a little more rhymes to the song, as now I really don’t know how to sing it and what kind of a rhythm should I expect from it.

Hello, I have to say, that is a very good song I like the chorus alot, You have the lyrics flowing very well, also you are very discriptive in this song. I can visualize a person looking at an Abandoned note. nice song over all, good job.  

i liked this song it was very good.  I only found two problems with it. her is one. Your wrote Tw lonely, different, people on. So don’t forget that o. Another thing i had a problem with was this line I replied in my defensive snarl,. I didn’t really like. Its not that its horrible or something like that i just didn’t like it. I just feel that there is a better way you could have phrased it.

hi there,

very good, i like the song pattern, content and mostly the lenght.(as akot of lyrics are way to long for a radio friendly song),,i think a better tiltle might have been “we both hoped for more” at the end of the chorus..just my opinion..good job though..

Nice chorus.  The verses are inconsistent in metre.  This would make the lyric more difficult to set to music.  You need to take more care with your editing, there are a number of typos and I don’t think it is appropriate to use shortcuts such as U’ve.  Other than that the lyric is moving and effective. You have captured the pain of the failed relationship very well.

it’s old schoolish. i don’t even know what i mean by that. but i like it. would love to hear it. i enjoy the chorus lines the most.

ps. two is missing the o.