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All poets are subjective
To those who matter.
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vbrunkenobi reviewed Version 1 -
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Hmmm, interesting. Where is the aha! moment? Or the irony? The ku needs to strike me. This one seems bland almost. Is it a lashing out in some way, a response to a reviewer that might of been vague or cruel? I feel that if you retooled the second line, you could have a great aha! moment that packs alot of punch. Let me know if you decide to rewrite, would love to see it.
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NatashaTragedy reviewed Version 1 -
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I agree.
Very well written and I admire the subject.
EAnonymous reviewed Version 1 -
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Interesting. The first letters spell “CAT”, but that doesn’t seem to be relevant. The first line functions almost as a title for the next two, which constitute a pretty good aphorism. This is an unusual way to write senryu! In fact, I think making this a quote might be more effective than this form, but of course it’s subjective. :) I like it!
Gunsaku reviewed Version 1 -
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Very creative
A poem about poets
The beholders eye
Is only one that matters
No poetry, no poet
squarehopper reviewed Version 1 -
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First line doesn’t link right to the rest of the piece.
“all” is an unnecceary word – a syllable killer.
“to” is as well.
THe last line is way too subjective and therefore weakens your piece.
rafamartin reviewed Version 1 -
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I think it`s too abstract (subjective) to be a haiku.
rrjs reviewed Version 1 -
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Greetings
The senryu works fine the way it is. The first line adds little though.
It is almost as meaningful written as
To those who matter.
All poets are subjective
You might add another line which would reinforce the self evidence of your statement and go along whith traditional form such as
To those who matter.
All poets are subjective
Snow falls in winter
I am sure you could find a line as good or better. Just a thought to use or discard at your whim.
Reaper reviewed Version 1 -
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Truth is always interesting when phrases so effectively. I like it.
graceofgene reviewed Version 1 -
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very true, nicely done
shady89 reviewed Version 1 -
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Your poem is good. Very short but okay for haiku. Poetry should be longer in my opinion but that’s me. You have a craft and talent for writing. How you just convey your message about poets so swiftly. Its great. We are .viewed subjectively because poetry is a part of the specific writer creating it. The first two lines make sense. But the last one is very questionable. Poets are subjective to those who matter. Thats your view and I respect that. You keep writing
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