Poetry / Social Phobia (Analysis)

poetry isn’t really my thing but i loved the last line.

I can relate with this whole heartedly. This reads well and is very witty, especially for such a difficult situation. I enjoy anything this personal… this revealing. “I will live for now” is funny as well as the fact that this could lead to your “spontaneous combustion.” Oh the phobia of phobia. Sucks!!

i’m not sure if its the use of words or the lack of breaks in the reading…but this reads a bit jumbled and frantic.  that could be the response you are going for, to show a type of panic and manic thinking.  but it is a little confusing to read.  but over all it is a good start.

Very good start!! The frist three lines are spectacular! Great rythmn, good sound, beautiful line-breaks.
The problems begin with the “that” at the end of line 3. It is a strange line-break. It seems forced. And then you repeat the word “that” in line 4, seriously weakining the poem.
“flushed flesh” is great alliteration, your english teacher would love it, but I think it’s too predictable. You don’t need it!
LOVE the IDEA that blushing is the “catalyst for my spontaneous combustion”!!! Beautiful imagery and I totally dig the “run, run, run!” Maybe “run, run, RUN!!” would work better. But anyway that feel to your poem reminds me of Poe.
I really  like the ending. It had a beautiful sound and rythmn to it as well. Also the last lien  break (between “the” and “only”) seems a little strange but the last line sounds so good it doesn’t matter!

Very Nice

I know the feeling well

I can relate to this piece.  I feel entirely uncomfortable in any social situation.

“those stares that cause the burning of my flushed flesh”, I know that feeling.  It’s a good line as well.

“consistently-like”, it’s not too important, but putting a space between the hyphen and at least one of the words would be helpful.

“now. and”  is the lowercase a intentional?  Also, maybe the and shouldn’t be there, “and through it all” works as well as “through it all” due to it being the start of a sentence.  Same thing for “and then I would have / a reason to…”, it would be just as well with “then I would have”

“run, run, run! from the room” as a poem, grammar isn’t all-important, and this a good reason why.  I think it was excellent for the runs to be capped with exclamation, then the sentence quiets down “from the room…”

I didn’t quite understand the last line.  The only worse reason for having the phobia being no reason at all. I can understand no reason is a worse reason, but then, what is the reason?  If the phobia is of people, people can’t be the reason.  I’m looking too much into understanding the line perhaps.

Good and relatable.