Thank you for the favorable review. I had hoped it painted a vivid picture such as what you said.
Poetry / Lovers Declaration
This tree bared its blood.
From our blade
We carved our love.
Immortalized,
Everlasting, without end
Without end for all to see.
Seasons shall pass us by.
Our souls will transcend.
Eternity will be our home.
Immortalized,
Everlasting, without end.
Before God we will carve it again,
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EnigMa_MoRpHiS reviewed Version 1 -
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I totally understand where you’re coming from… I loved the flow into the ending of the stanza… Very well put together. Bravo!
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sexier_emo13 reviewed Version 1 -
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I think that this is a very thought-provoking poem. It talks of how when you do something final, like carve into a tree, it stays there and gorws up just like the love in your heart. until you die and can be together that much longer. I really like it and the picture it paints for me.
azure reviewed Version 1 -
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I like this—but is it unfinished? Or was the comma intentional? If it was intentional, and I was supposed to be jarred, it was certainly effective. Otherwise, you might want to think about changing it, or possibly adding more to the poem. Do the lovers transcend time, or do they grow apart?
That said, I really love the imagery of the tree and all the ways the metaphor is used. Thanks for writing!
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