Poetry / The Fragility of Flames

The word ‘humans’ in the second stanza is not needed. The word ‘we’ makes the point clear and the use of the term breaks the feel of the poem. I am not sure about ‘frost,’ I might be missing the point. If it used to set up a dynamic between the fire and saying that people are looking for something other than the fragile flames I would drop it. The poem is short and the idea presented is complex enough with out trying to put anymore in. I like the idea of ‘brittle brevity’ but the alliteration feels forced. Overall good moving poem.