Poetry / The Secret of the Maze

Only these gates, from the distance, can unleash the magic maze
Only these hands, from the distance, can whisper to your face
and invite you, and warn you, and laugh to your innocence
Your eyes open for so long and still can not solve this delusion  
The cold breeze in the air will instruct your intuition
the uncertain shape in the ground, your footprints left behind
to fear is to sin here, fear not then, fear not
feel that you are at home, this is your new home
get ready for a long undefined journey
get all you can get and you will perish

One place, wrong way, wait then, go ahead and get lost
One place, one maze, go left, go right, is upper or above
Don’t be a fool, do not watch your steps
Think while walking, think very well
and be able to see what you face
leave your emotions and memories
let the intuition be your own guidance
last thing you lose are hopes

No, do not you wish to stop. What an unnecessary thought!
keep running instead, keep running
Time goes on and on.. and will not ever wait for you
No, do not you wish to stop. What an unnecessary thought!
Time goes on and on; the mace might end up devouring you
No longer you are playing (aren’t you?) but the mace with you
(Don’t you agree?)

Suddenly some clues, suddenly some hopes
two keys seem to be fake but two keys
and then , in the distance, oh,  how many doors!
Infinite answers but how many of them is my truth
every question hides a new quest
Where am I , where am I going?
My hopes shall never die
Where did I leave my hopes?
My hopes, my clues, my keys
Are they fake after all?

I found nothing here but
Only two different colors
Three long bridges
Two sad tears
Three painful puzzles
Nine clues but all in vain
I don’t want to play
then who is playing?

Me and my merciless Maze messing with me
Man and his madness writing with blood
Monster facing horror in a delicate mirror
Is just another mortal martyr
The secret of the maze
The muse in my mess
A Magical mystery!

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Valiantdie1z avatar General Stranger

December 02, 2007

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Valiantdie1z reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I thought this piece was beautiful.

However the lines:
my maze invite you and warn your innocent eyes
whose open still cant infere what will come next

They are little confusing with the grammatical errors, and weak transition.

But over-all it was wonderful.

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