Quotes / Petal Love V.2

very well put;it jumps out to me.i can see a petal, come off everyday. the more and more you love that person. good work!

Okay its romantic but overly so, I mean if your trying to woo the most poetic of mates then this may help but otherwise its just too sweet.
Gavinswar

I hate to say it but this quote is somewhat cliched and cheesy.  It is somewhat romantic and would probably be viewed as sweet and super-romantic if given to your girlfriend but from a writer’s point of view its just too much.

Keep writing though, its good to see that your being creative!

Aww, thats cute, I like it most people go with the stars in the sky but never the petals on a flower. Its definitly a beautiful quote. Thanks for sharing this with me.

The Raven

A creative way to express ones love.

Nawww…. whoever it is, they are very lucky. May you continue your love forever.

I missed the first version of this. I’m worried what it was like, considering. I understand the intent of this, but for it to have a chance as a “quote,” it has to flow clearly and be swift. I think this gets caught up in itself, but it could easily be reworked to climb to its tier.

Maybe something like this:

“My love for you rests in each petal of an endless flower bed.”

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April 27, 2008

by _Marybeth_

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Thanks for the review.
Yes, I suppose this doesn’t have much of a flow, the first version was worded differently it went like this, “Each petal I pluck is my love for you, and I have an internity of petals awaiting to be plucked.”
I changed it because of some spelling erros, and some thinking about wording it differently.

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I loved this quote. It makes sense, and in my opinion this is far better, than the original, it sounds a lot smoother. ‘Pluck’ could do with some work, I suggest you maybe consider a different word, its not very easy on the tongue, but everything else flows wonderfully.

Well done.

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March 25, 2008

by _Marybeth_

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Thank you so much. This is one of my favorite reviews so far on this piece of work, thank you :D

March 25, 2008

by IndyWalsh

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Many thanks (:

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