Lyrics / My Title of Depth
It’s like I can’t breathe
It’s like my heart is gulping down acid
It’s as if I’m skydiving without a parachute.
I’m falling, I’m falling, I’m falling.
Burn me with your cigarettes—stab me with your nails.
Cut out my lungs—let me fail.
Drag my body to a dump and cut me up.
I wanted a life without tears.
One without my fear
I wanted you to change. I wanted, I wanted.
I’m still falling, still falling.
Burn me with your cigarettes—stab me with your nails.
cut out my lungs—let me fail.
Drag my body to a dump and cut me up.
cut me-cut me-cut me—
up.
throw me down and kill my dreams. Slash my wrist and make me scream
Tell me lies and make me believe.
make me, make me. Make me believe them.
keep me locked up-lock me up- feed me doubt. stuff my throat with dishonesty.
Drag my body to a dump.
kill my dignity. make me cry and hear me scream.
Knock out my lights, shove glass down my eyes.
kill me.
cut me.
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hmm its disturbing. but it works for your piece. it disturbed me and caused an emotional response in me. however i dont like the first stanza much its just not very good i dont know.
these i like:
throw me down and kill my dreams. Slash my wrist and make me scream
Tell me lies and make me believe.
keep me locked up-lock me up- feed me doubt. stuff my throat with dishonesty.
Drag my body to a dump.
kill my dignity. make me cry and hear me scream.
the only thing i feel you should change is in the ending you should change from:
Knock out my lights, shove glass down my eyes.
kill me.
cut me.
Knock out my lights, shove glass down my eyes.
cut me.
kill me.
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It might be a decent performance piece but some of the lines are pretty unforgivable. Sky diving without a parachute? I know you can do better than that. You have natural sprung rhythm and angst so why do you waste it on lines like that?
hi there,
cause you need a title so people will know what they are reading or hearing and you don’t mention, title of depth..i hope you have happier lyrics in the future to write..but keep writing…take care
well i read your lyric and found it interesting..a little sad but like you said..you are what you are..i think you should rename your lyric, “im falling”
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