Poetry / The How To On Forgiveness

I’ve been taking the steps to let you back in,
I’ve unlocked the door to the walls that have been keeping me,
slipped a piece of paper back through the mail slot
that eloquently says “I miss you the most.”

I’ve been taking the steps back to being honest,
I put the truth down on paper and mailed it out to sea.
you must of intercepted my message,
just to find out I was right in all your wrongs.

I’ve been taking the steps back to remembering,
it took me two years to try to forget:
the way it feels to be open, to let my thoughts go free
to be seen right through, to turn invisible in an empty room.

with my hopes of taking the steps to starting over,
we may regress with each step, but over time fall back in.
I can only hope my paranoia is just that:
pointless thoughts that hold no truth in the palm of their hands.

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January 29, 2008

ruthybird

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One correction, please: In 2nd stanza: ”you must have intercepted my message…”

One question:  what is meant by “just to find out I was right in all your wrongs”?
If you are ready to forgive, why are you saying that you were right and they were always wrong?  Or is that not what this meant?  When you forgive, don’t you acknowledge that you may have been in the wrong sometimes too?

Last line:  pointless thoughts that hold no truth in the palm of their hands do not have hands.  This is not a good metaphor.  ”pointless thoughts that hold no truth” would be enough by itself.

All in all, a very good start for someone of your age. (Please don’t be offended by that.) Keep on writing.