Limericks / Hey... You... Quit Looking At My "Portmanteau"!

You’re not blowing me away with anything too deep or provocative, but for what it is, it’s funny. Your notes were very helpful, as it didn’t give away the ending, yet still allowed the reader to know the necessary words to get the punchline. Overall, quite a good job!

Limerick 1:
line,1 better meter: What’s more inventive than puns?
line 5, remove THAT for tighter meter. (it’s extraneous anyway and adds nothing)

limerick 2:
line 2, a professional and A consumer
line 3, to mush words together
line 5, and cause you to ‘port-man-to humor. (a play on portmanteaux…
to deliver man to humor… get it? ;-)P

limerick 3:
line 3, the sad little loser
line 4, would have to maneuver
in line 5 I’d add a C to abibliophobiC

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December 27, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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limerick 1:
your line 1: does not add up to nine syllables.
your line 5: may be extraneous, but it adds up to nine syllables

limerick 2:
your line 1: Adding “a” makes that line 10 syllables. Should only be nine.
your line 3: “to mush” or “mushing”... six of one, half dozen of the other.
line 5: eh… clever

limerick 3:
your line 3 and 4: eh… I like mine better.
your line 5: It’s MY portmanteau, I’ll say it how I WANT!!
:p

So I guess what is more important here… syllables or stresses? Every writer will have a different answer.

December 27, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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and I was using “gianormous” in the 2nd limerick as a portmanteau of “giant” and “enormous” in case you didn’t catch that.

December 27, 2007

by evath

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ok, here it is… and don’t say I didn’t warn you
but the rhythmic pattern is illustrated here with Os.
the little Os take the less stress and the large Os
take the heavy stress in this meter.

good luck with your next limerick
now I WILL tear you a new one ;-)
consider yourself warned… bruuu  h a  h a  h a

oOo oOo oO
oOo oOo oO
oOo oOo
oOo oOo
oOo oOo oO

and/or

oOo oOo oOO
oOo oOo oOO
oOo oO
(o)oOo oO        first (o) is optional
oOo oOo ooOO

limerick writer beware!

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by ScottBJohnson

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I already had this stress conversation with someone else. You need to read my “Whatza Limerick Synopsis”.

December 27, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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onetwoTHREEonetwoTHREEonetwoTHREE
onetwoTHREEonetwoTHREEonetwoTHREE
onetwoTHREEonetwoTHREE
onetwoTHREEonetwoTHREE
onetwoTHREEonetwoTHREEonetwoTHREE

December 27, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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Or if you prefer:
oneTWOthreeoneTWOthreeoneTWOthree = 9
oneTWOthreeoneTWOthreeoneTWOthree = 9
oneTWOthreeoneTWOthree = 6
oneTWOthreeoneTWOthree = 6 oneTWOthreeoneTWOthreeoneTWOthree = 9

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LOL! Thanks for the invite to read! Excellent!

It’s confusing, and a bit hard to understand, but I like that. It was definitely humourous, and enjoyable to read.

I’m not sure what an abibliophobivignette is. I’m assuming it’s a short description of what abibliophobia is?

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December 20, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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“abibliophobivignette” would be a “portmanteau” for “a short literary piece about the fear of running out of things to read.” Imagine if such a thing had to be written in strictly puns or portmanteau, never mind that the person reading it (who could be a chronic abibliophobe) would always be in fear of reaching the end…

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I loved the title. does that count?
mushíng (the stress on last syllabl, I imagine)
but what’s up with the last line.
TWEAK TIME ;-)
Tighten it up.
study the word pun and what it is and how it comes about, etc.
and then build your last line with the rhyme.
find a pun ending with the “UN” sound.
“I didn’t mean to write one” haahah
Nice subject
It’s berry “punny”

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December 20, 2007

by anonymous

I was never happy with it anyway. Take a look at the new one.

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Mushing words together? Puns are statements with double meanings. Kind of ambiguous here.

I’ve seen better, but I have seen much worth. And the judge said EIGHT!

quirky and fun. I wish you hadn’t put an “s” on the end of “pun”, so that it would rhyme better, and together/pleasure is kind of a weak rhyme, but the content was amusing, which I’m guessing was your intention all along.

Made me smile.

Hmmmm….I read this because I was intrigued by the clever and humorous title. However, the poem itself didn’t live up to my expectations. It’s a good idea, just needs a little more thought put into it. I would suggest keeping the title and reworking the rest of the poem around that.

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December 02, 2007

by anonymous

I changed the last line. Let me know if you think it is better.

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