I will
Never be normal
Never be ok
Never be right
Never be cool
Never be hot
Never be the man
Never grasp the brass
Never be a good egg
Never be a role model
Never leave remains
Never be happy
Never be a player
Never like this game
Taylor X© 2007
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This does show a lot of potential but I also think that you have a bit to go before publishing. However, I do see that with a little work your poetry can evolve to that level.
The subject matter is very relateable. I always worry that I’ll never be completely happy and I know I’ll never be perfect, I think a lot of people feel these things. I do think that maybe your can extend on this poem. Maybe add some lines about how these realizations make you feel, if you think they’ll change, things like that.
The most thoguht provoking statement in this poem is “I will Never leave remains”. This can be interpereted many ways, and I’m wondering what you meant.
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