Poetry / As We Should

Let me love you like angels’ love their God,
let me inhale you like a beggar’s dying breath.
Be my reality, infinite and unfathomable;
the soul to my being,
the heart to my beat.
Be my eyes, and I, your ears;
let us conquer this world together,
just as we should.

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February 23, 2008

rsman26

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29	M	Bakersfield, CA	October 15

rsman26 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I liked it for the most part but I feel if you try you can go deeper with these sentiments.

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January 27, 2008

HarryVann

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HarryVann reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I like your voice in this poem. Well Done!

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December 28, 2007

fuzznuts81

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fuzznuts81 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Usually not a fan of love writings… but this is not cheesy and has great similes. I like you kept it short, so that it did not become sappy and cliche.