Flash Fiction / MetaAnthropomorphaDrouble

I was entertained as I read this, even though I felt that
you asked so many questions that sometimes seemed more like
statements ending in questions marks. Was this true?

If this was actually flash fiction, I missed the part
where there was a middle, or even the end in a conclusive
sort of fiction ending. This seemed more like a letter
from a very mentally unstable poem; I’d recommend therapy!!
So insecure and weak.

I did like this, so please don’t get me wrong.
I hate to leave and have you cease to exist.
You make me feel guilty and responsable for you.
Heaven help me!
;-)

I love this! The writing musing about the reader reading the writing, contemplating length of survival. . . excellent ponderings. Hmmm. . . could end
“My existence – my epitaph”. Now I’ll have to try.

I love it!  The story has come alive.  It must have taken you awhile to insure you had exactly 200 words in the telling of the drouble’s story without adding too much or taking away too much.  You nailed this piece.

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January 11, 2008

by ScottBJohnson

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Thanks. It’s sort of become my new direction to play with different realities.

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Quite a nice piece. It is calming, in a way knowing that all things must end, must die; but you do write in a way that is full of sadness and remorse for this “character”. If I were to stop reading, then “it” would be no more. But if I finished, it would also be no more – But, it lives on in my memory and you have done a fabulous job at that. Awesome work =]

This didn’t connect very well with me.  I love the idea… it is fresh as I haven’t seen it in a long while (Neverending story) but I think you let it get the best of you with all the psychosis and the terminology.  I see the character, I see the conflict, I see a resolution of sorts, but I don’t see any real depth to the piece. It is mostly expository and, hence, made me feel disconnected.  

I think if you take control of the idea more… and wrestle with it, you may have something here.

I would maybe introduce another character other than the reader… maybe a piece written by Yung?

Good luck?

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December 30, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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hmmm… I have been wrestling with a lot of this terminology lately in my work, so I am loathe to give it up. It if doesn’t apply specifically here, point taken. My friend was talking to me today about a snake that eats itself at the tail, or the concept that the “world begins when we are born and ends when we die and that’s all we know”. He’s a fan of the movie “Dark Star” which is about this bomb that comes to life and people have to convince it not to explode. If a poem comes to life, does it only exist because we read it? Sort of the “tree falling in the woods” question… things to ponder.

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This is a wonderful piece – I read my first drabble today, and this is my first doubledrabble.  All kinds of new things to explore here.

The idea of having this piece musing about the metaphysics of its existence – very clever concept.  If you didn’t invent abibliophobiac, I want to claim ownership.

Lovely. I enjoyed it.

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December 30, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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Sorry. I found “abibliophobia” on Wikipedia under “protologisms”. Take a look there though. Soe interesting “new” words! :-) Thanks for reading!

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