Poetry / F@#ck it!
F@#k it I don’t care, he says and he means it.
What’re ya gona do, he says when he should have seen it.
To be honest I haven’t got a clue, he says when he should have known it.
It seemed like a good idea at the time, he says to condone it.
Bare in mind I’ve never done this before, said in anticipation.
I love you, said simply to break the tension.
My heart is yours, said with what I hope is sincerity, for when I reply, I feel the same, I want you to know that what I say I mean
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Certainly good, one of the better poems on urbis. You’re not really concerned with structure are you? Maybe leaving the last line stand on its own would help to emphazise it, cos it is really important.
I like the story behind the poem, cos really it can mean a lot of things and that certainly helps.
But the best thing about the poem is that its not negative nor emo as most of the poetry seen here on urbis.
Well done!
PS: You can say fuck on urbis
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I liked the f-bombs because they got my attention right away but after that you didn’t really writing anything that grabbed me after you got my attention. I’m not really sure what this piece is about or who these characters are which really takes away from the piece.
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