Poetry / road trip

petrified, the bridge snoozes
dusty on the river’s death bed.
leaning like a sunbeam,
sturdy as an airful of birthday confetti,
it tapers like a siren passing brightly.
an impish sapphire eye gleaming,
little fluffy clouds kaleidoscope the landscape.
my suitcase has been a wildseed
strutting down toll roads as impatient as
a hotel faucet’s dripping.
the interstate irritates like a hotly twisted comforter,
and the ashes of Arizona summer freckle me
as bravery collects like mercury rolling,
and delight, crimson as twin tail lights,
recollects a glowstick snapping.

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May 01, 2008

EvnSuicideAgrees

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25	M	Jacksonville, FL	May 17

EvnSuicideAgrees reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Very good imagery and choice of words….I really liked this one, my favorite part has to be this line—

“strutting down toll roads as impatient as
a hotel faucet’s dripping.”

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April 29, 2008

Brandy_wine

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Brandy_wine reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Keep working it. Some of the images are solid but the cohesiveness is vague in spots. I wasn’t sure what the message was after the beginning it got lost a bit. You do choose lovely words and put them together nicely.