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Haiku/Senryu / First Entries
The skin is broken
Hungry now, you bite harder
seeking the center
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I admit my first thought was tootsie pop, and then I wasn’t sure. You’ve created a mystery. Universal truth that can be interpreted many ways.. again.. brilliant!
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A frightening verse in these days of viruses.
This is excellent. Simple, but piercing. Sparse but deep. The literal act of eating an apple (or whatever) when described with your skill is so easily read in many other ways. I have nothing to add or pick on. Well done.
I am not sure I understood how the title applied
to the senryu, and think maybe you could find
something to synthesize better.
The haiku itself was brilliance!
“To be understood” was an odd topic choice, as, to me,
there seem to be a few ways to ‘interpret’ the piece.
So I’m not sure I understood you, or was reading in
my own multiple interpretations:
Either someone biting into their lover during
the height of passion, or someone taking a bite
out of a succulent piece of fruit.
either way…
Kudos to you for a wonderful moment!!!!
E~
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