Haiku/Senryu / Flowers In Bloom

I like the first two lines. Is there some other way we can say “beauty in petals” in the third line without explicitly using the word “beauty”? Just a thought.

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February 21, 2008

by stum

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Thanks for the suggestion, will seriously consider. :)

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This haiku has elegance and simplicity. Absolutely lovely.

Elegant and simple! This is what I look for in haiku!

Beauty in your haiku!

I think this is simply excellent.  I hope you have more?

This haiku shares the same simple beauty as the flower you describe. This is what haiku is all about. Perfect tens all around! :)

7-word haiku
a wonder to behold here
from such a young one.