Lyrics / "STRUNG OUT"

I don’t have much to critique for this piece because I think it’s fine the way it is. Maybe if there were some music to it I could, lol.

My favorite lines are the first two, very captivating.

I love the parallel between love and drugs. In many ways they are the same. They can be wonderful in moderation, but if you have too much and it’s taken away you can lose yourself.

Unless you plan to make this a fast paced song, I think its a perfect length.
I suppose that you may be thinking of country as a genre, but pop would work, blues mught be interesting.
The analogy of being strung out and unrequited love works very well.
Sorry to say this but the last 2 lines don’t work for me as the ending.

Aw.  Let me just say something about your work: it always makes me remember a time when I felt what you are describing in your songs.  I can always relate.  But this one may have hit home the most.  I think it has more emotion and poeticness than your other pieces that I’ve read.  Good work!

Not realy my thing, used to be in a band years ago, but these lyrics are a little different to what I used to write about.

I used to be the front man/ song writer for an Indie band called “Spooky-child”

I thought it was good but a little short.
I loved the emotion that the lyrics evoked.

I like how you stayed on the same subject, instead of leaning to far off the path like some others do.

Good Job,
Chris

i don’t know anything about lyrics but i like this one it’s sort of like a message. you did a good job

i could definitely hear a tune in the background while reading this. depending on the genre that youre shooting for, this could be a good one to jam to. LATER

awww, It’s a good love song on the afterward effects and it’s not to gushy. It’s well done