Humor/Satire / Swing On (Analysis)

So few words but the message is crystal clear. I admire your ability to say alot with very little. There is nothing I can think of to say to this. Except maybe that I wish to see a story that dives more into the background of this poem. It is a strong piece but would be stronger with a story behind it. And maybe the 3 lines could be the opening quote to the story?

It’s short, sweet, simple -it wins!

Seriously though, I totally understand this. Piss and vinegar…

Hello. This is so funny. Ha, ha, ha.

You are so correct with this statement. I would tell you how to improve it, but it stands on it’s own, with excellence.

Keep writing!

Best wishes to you.

Interesting take. Nice play on words.

Haha, that’s great.

It is very weird and short but definitely… interesting

ha.  i’m not sure how this will “warm a few hearts” but this is a very funny piece of writing.  thank you.  please don’t stop writing.

Thanks for the laugh.  I can’t really critique it though, it works as written!

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April 08, 2008

by mollyp

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Thank you. Could it bee the title of a short book?!

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Well, the first requirement of this sort of humour is that it makes you laugh and it had the desired effect. It made me chuckle. Nice use of direction/erection by the way.
The first line could be perceived in more than one way and I like the ambiguity of it.

Entertaining stuff.

Thanks for sharing.

Clever. Good use of alliteration. Gets right to the point!