Haiku/Senryu / BrainPower

Alright so this is about Brain Power huh, Well I see some resemblance (spelling Wrong) to this idea.I am Adjusting to the thought’s of hakiu’s and so yeah.. I enjoy these word’s for thought..

I get it. so simple yet so powerful. You have a talent that can only grow with age. Look forward to reading more.

This is good, “Universal Glow” for some reason was a surprise but and good one… keep writting

Lovely epitaph for the logic of old minded indifferdents.

I loved the first two lines, but the last one lost me.  Maybe I’m not reading into it deep enough, but I didn’t get it.  But I really liked the wording you used and flow of it.  Thanks for sharing!

I loved the first two lines but the last one is a bit… soggy. I still can appreciate the piece as a whole. I’d be interested in knowing the inspiration behind this creation.

You have been reading my mind!

The poem is okay, but the title needs to be fixed. The lines are already straightforward- don’t completely ruin this piece for your readers with a title that leaves the piece with absolutely no mystery. At this point it’s still bland and needs work.

Also, the word “imagination” has become too much of a childish cliche and, therefore, is too vague. Find a better way too convey what you intended to say with that word. Not necessarily a synonym, although that could work. Try using multiple, preferably short (considering your syllable limitations), words instead.

Happy writing.

-K.S.

Nailed it.
You used yours well when you created this.
Like the caps in this. How about a colon instead of a -