Poetry / so far untitled

If anyone said a kiss couldn’t stop the world
They never knew you
Never knew how my heaven and earth melted
In the inky blackness of your eyes
I thought love meant keeping my back to the wall
Not the amazing soul I saw in your smile
Your words caress me; your eyes assess me
Your heart knows me; your body owns me
Your mind tastes me; your lips take me
If fire in my blood shown through my skin
I could touch the heavens and star blaze for you
My eyes could glow sunbeam, my lips explode
Lasers and fireworks through fingers, toes
Nights would burn in passion Technicolor
Dreams could streak psychedelic rainbows
Flowers turn cold, left vapid and colorless
Watch speechless, burn jealous, reaching
Wanting, but a scent of the spark, igniting
A single twinkle in your eye

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January 31, 2008

jaugne

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jaugne reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Very, very striking in it’s imagery. I enjoyed this. I had to reread a couple of lines, so you might want to polish up the clarity a bit, but overall, I think you did a very good job here. Kudos.