Poetry / Words (Analysis)

kudos! Everything amounts to words and words to ideas and ideas to thoughts which consist of words..sorry for rambling great job!

i like this poem and to me it’s very interesting. i like that it’s positive and optimistic and i believe this is worth sticking to.

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July 04, 2008

by Maroonone

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Thank you fro reviewing my poem.  I appreciate your honesty.

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I love this piece. Honey filled, warmed to ripple in the golden sunlight. This is a powerful line filled with so much imagery. Nice work, talented woman.

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by Maroonone

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If you wrote a few more lines and re-worked syllable counts, this would be a great sonnett!  At first, I found the repetition of “word” to be too much, but after re-reading, I think it does work well.  Especially since the focus of the poem is on ‘words.’  

A little short for a song, but still very good. You rhymed the words in lines 1-4, but not in the rest. It kinda messes up the flow, but the lyrics in general are great.

This is a nice piece, think it needs to be a bit longer to capture more imagination.

It could possible get published in an anthology

Well done

i like ‘warmed to ripple’

i also like the final line, especially its simple yet commanding rhythm.

I do, however, think you have more to give on the other lines. The imagery and words used – especially for a poem called ‘words’ do not for me stand out very much.

describing a day as ‘bright’, for example, immediately loses my interest. why not instead let us know it’s bright in another way (showing vs. ........)

not bad, but i won;t remember this poem, no. Sorry!

The meter is not as smooth as I would like, but I like the write anyway. I feel as if kind and positive words are being compared to being in a beautiful mountain retreat. A place of gentle peace and tranquility. A place refreshing to ones inner peace.  That’s my take. That’s my opinion.