metalmadcat's profile

I definitely like the idea. I'd love to see the whole thing done. Fallacies! -what a nice concentration you place us to think about. You have taken abstraction and peel it up into beautiful crusts. I think this is great. Artistic, no doubt. Keep it with the good stuff.! Meow FOR YOU AND YOURS.

So you are saying the rain shall be my tears. You are leaving this feeling to the laws of nature, such rain. All it makes me think of is someone very coward, and is quite depressing. Also there is not so much appreciation to nature. It sort of tells me rain is like a trash can where I can throw away what makes me feel ..bad. Well , this was my first impression. I might be really wrong to what you intended was, initially.

mmm.. is a good observation. Self center people may have more than one problem for sure. Yet I think not all of us can be self sufficient. Actually no one can be self sufficient if not first having met someone , needing, someone before, do not you think? Either way I would approve this quote and I believe you came up with something to think about. Keep thinking..but dont forget to live as well. :) Meow for you and yours.

I think you did a great job by using rhyme scheme. I did see how everything fit in perfectly. It looked to me , al least. Maybe, the only think I would say, is that since it is a long rhyme it could flow so much better by having some pauses not applying so much narration but some voices. Of course this is just my suggestion and you may just keep it this way. It is up to you, remember, style always stand and dont let anyone touch it. :) Here is my favorite line: (I find it powerful to what you...