oh , so much more, will we ever find complete comfort or will we die in our attempt to think there is not? I doubt we ever do. But you see, that is one of our characteristics of humanity. Though I think world see it as a tragedy while I think that is the beginning of our journey, our muze of this maze. Your poem is well written, very clear. I can perceive every feeling you mention. As a matter of fact I felt as if I had written that. I can associate your anxiousness with my own, just like you...

flash fiction? what is the difference between flash and science fiction or any other? Oh well, first time I read flash fiction . Does this attempt to be funny? I think sort of was although I was kind of confuse to what happened to her girlfriend, did she die? did she ever exist? What was that bomb for? I guess he wanted to destroy the world but..hey it was a metaphor..ahrg.. I must be very tired and I am running out of credit, so my cat apoligizes. I ll try to come back with more relevant rev...

I think is a good theme, very tragic. My suggestions would be some grammar corrections , mispellings and such but overall I enjoyed the story, well explained. Though I was sort of confused with characters, maybe you could introduce them so we know exactly whose these are, when I read their names they did not say anything to me, or at least this what I thought at first glance. Keep writing, I'd like to see some more.

Oh, indeed, such a reflection we have in here. You can not fit, when you can not fit you have learned there is not site for you. When there is not site is because you learn the world has taught us all to erase any site through news, television and such, and coffee , and yes stereotypes rise..-among so many other concequences- and we find no site when we see that there is no site in this world and it is not because we are full inside, on the contrary we are empty but the world -again teaching ...

It wa simply amazing how well it flows. I am still impressed by the techinique the writer applied. The alliteration is so present and match perfectly in every line , like a chain. I'd like to read the book with the pictures. Although is for children I think is so creative and the end is very meaningful, despite the fact that the audience are children --of course Great masterpiece. Keep writing. That was really professional.

I enjoyed this piece from the very moment. The title fit in perfectly, simple and says a lot. As for the metaphor with the bird was very accurate as well. Your thoughts were very clear and to the point. Nevertheless you may make it longer and support more of your ideas but if it is your style then do not make any change. I just think (in my opinion) it could have more supported ideas. Overall, great poem. "That line you drew in the sand – that was me." "This new line on my face – that was you...

I think you did a great job by using rhyme scheme. I did see how everything fit in perfectly. It looked to me , al least. Maybe, the only think I would say, is that since it is a long rhyme it could flow so much better by having some pauses not applying so much narration but some voices. Of course this is just my suggestion and you may just keep it this way. It is up to you, remember, style always stand and dont let anyone touch it. :) Here is my favorite line: (I find it powerful to what you...

mmm.. is a good observation. Self center people may have more than one problem for sure. Yet I think not all of us can be self sufficient. Actually no one can be self sufficient if not first having met someone , needing, someone before, do not you think? Either way I would approve this quote and I believe you came up with something to think about. Keep thinking..but dont forget to live as well. :) Meow for you and yours.

So you are saying the rain shall be my tears. You are leaving this feeling to the laws of nature, such rain. All it makes me think of is someone very coward, and is quite depressing. Also there is not so much appreciation to nature. It sort of tells me rain is like a trash can where I can throw away what makes me feel ..bad. Well , this was my first impression. I might be really wrong to what you intended was, initially.

I definitely like the idea. I'd love to see the whole thing done. Fallacies! -what a nice concentration you place us to think about. You have taken abstraction and peel it up into beautiful crusts. I think this is great. Artistic, no doubt. Keep it with the good stuff.! Meow FOR YOU AND YOURS.