mfrost's profile

mfrost avatar
AGE: 48
LOC: Rochester, NY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 13

I write poetry that celebrates Great Souls and the strides they’ve taken toward evolutionizing our thinking, our social rights, our commonwealth, and our ecosystems.  I celebrate Great Souls such as Mohandas Gandhi, Martin Luther King, Mandela, and Muhammad Yanus.

I prefer to write in traditional forms but I enjoy poetry of all styles.

Item Stats
Reviewer Stats
Items
Version 2
1 Review   0 Comments
Raise Up! The evolution has begun! The quiet tune that has through time been sung Now calls to dance a turning world that’s heard The music but has not evolved as one. We sing an evolutionary air, Not revolutionary. War forswear And raise, not rise. Raise up all men as one And be of those a path a peace prepare. We sing a song of non-violent, well informed, Engaged, determined, deft, conjointly formed And conscious social evolution. Sing And dance with us—the world will be transfo...
Ratings & Rankings
Version 2
1 Review   0 Comments
I am so delighted with diversity. It’s all the rage for me. ‘Though some may pass On its fine charms and rage against my set, I’ll still be charmed with everything that’s made The world so right. I simply cannot bear To think how dull the world would be if on Us all some moldy mold was settled on. Boring! What’s life without diversity? What force of pall would force us all to pass Some test of similarity? Who’d set The standards we’d have to meet? Wou...
Ratings & Rankings
Version 2
1 Review   0 Comments
Muhammad Yunus, micro financier And founder of the growing Grameen Bank, I cheer The evolutionary strides you’ve made In bringing the poor some needed banking aid. With just a twenty-seven dollar start, In Nineteen-Seventy-Six, you put your heart To work in Bangladesh to find a way A simple bank could poverty allay. You loaned to those who had the greatest need And guided them until they did succeed. And when they paid you back, you loaned again Until your bank became a great campaign. ...
Ratings & Rankings
Poetry / For Peace
Version 2
5 Reviews   0 Comments
For peace the nations speak with one Resounding voice to say: The end of wars can be achieved If we united stay. For peace the poets sing their songs And plead with those who hear: Please, let us now renounce our hate And conquer all our fear. For peace the saints all teach that God Would have men freely live, So let’s now live as God would have And each the past forgive. For peace the Sufis build a bridge From God to man below, So let’s receive the blessings that Our God’s love does bestow. ...
Ratings & Rankings
Version 1
5 Reviews   3 Comments
Yes, Doctor King, it is your praise I raise! You were Drum Major in the noble quest For freedom in a world of dispossessed. You changed the world by serving the oppressed. Your voice and willingness to serve I praise! “Avoid romanticizing King,” some say. “He was no saint.” And they say I do Disservice to you and them to view You more than the common man they knew. They say that I your memory betray. But I will celebrate your soul: *You did your duty as a Christian ought; *You brought salvati...
Reviews
Poetry / The Vlakyries
This is a good poem as written. I have read some Fantasy magazines that would publish it. But you post it here for critique, so I'll tell you what I would do differently. In short poems, I think metaphors works better than similes, so I would rewrite the first two lines to metaphors. The last two lines of the first stanza give a sense that the Vlakyrie "keep the company" of heroes. As I understand it, the Vlakyrie "seek" heroes in order to pray upon them. The first two lines set this image, b...
Poetry / simply blue
I'm a little confused by line one. Is "simplicity" the sweet memory or should the line read "Simple sweet memories"? The omission of a personal pronoun at the beginning of line two requires a colon (or comma) at the end of line one. Line 3/4 is almost perfect (take out the period at the end of line 3). Perfect image, though: I get the image of those "simple sweet memories" at the beginning of a relationship we seal in our hearts even before the relationship has been written. I suggest a comma...
Poetry / Grad school
I think the potential of this poem lies in re-envisioning the narrator as a naive suburbanite in grad school outside Manhattan longing for the day he will conquer the big city. But the narrator should be naive, not the poet--or reader. Let the reader see the naivety of the narrator and the knowledge of the poet that the big city is not so easily conquered.
0.0% Review Quality (3 Votes)
This is a good poem. Line 10 is excellent. As an advocate for form, I'd like to see you shape this into a sonnet (with its association with love poetry). As an advocate for character, I'd like to see you develop the self-loathing of your narrator--but subtly (think "My Last Duchess" by Robert Browning)--and play that off liine 10.
The poem does read well aloud - which is a testament to your ability with words and rhythm. Unfortunately, the tone is pontificating. The theme is good; worthy of poetry. I think it would be more palatable as satire, though (think Steven Colbert in the Colbert Report).
Favorites