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LOC: Slidell, LA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 12
LOC: Slidell, LA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 12
Well, here it goes…
My name is Mike, and I am a 16 year old attending Slidell High School. I have to admit, I am REALLY looking forward to reveiwing and getting feedback on writing. Writing IS what makes the world go round, I believe, and Urbis is the best way to prove it. I look forward to meeting new people who are like me; in the process share insight with one another. :)
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Act Two Scene I Instrumental music plays as Act Two begins. As the opening music silences, the grand curtain is pulled to reveal the city set; a rush of people are going different places and doing different things. A reprise of Morning News plays, and as it does, a group of people to the side speak. Man 1 – Guys, get this, get this! (Unfolds newspaper in front of them.) ‘Young lady brutally murdered getting off the blue line last night!’ Man 2 – Them thugs are at it again! Man 1 – You got tha...
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Scene I Overture begins. During the overture we see silent scenes take over. A mom and dad quarrel over a child between them. The mom holds onto the child as the father reaches in for it. The mother fights back to defend the child, but soon the man slaps her. The father looks down at the child, backs away, and runs out of the scene. The mother gets up, hugs the child, looks around, grabs the child’s hand, and they run out of the scene. They enter back on, and we see the silhouette of a few su...
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Scene I Overture begins. During the overture we see silent scenes take over. A mom and dad quarrel over a child between them. The mom holds onto the child as the father reaches in for it. The mother fights back to defend the child, but soon the man slaps her. The father looks down at the child, backs away, and runs out of the scene. The mother gets up, hugs the child, looks around, grabs the child’s hand, and they run out of the scene. They enter back on, and we see the silhouette of a few su...
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Compassion is defined as the human quality of understanding someone’s misplacement. Throughout the story To Kill A Mockingbird, Atticus Finch demonstrated the act of compassion to both his family and to the people of Maycomb County during the endeavors he pursued in undertaking Tom Robinson’s court case; because of this Atticus Finch stepped into the skin and shoes of many people and undertook their perspectives. “Tom Robinson now sits before you…a quiet, respectable, humble Negro who had the...
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Alright, here we go. This excerpt from your novel was decent. I thought the chapters were a little too short, but that's what some writers perfer to do. It just felt like chapter 2 - to where it ends could have been all chapter 2 and didn't need to be split up like that. Chapter One was a great opener, but once again I would have loved to invision more of that scene that you writing about. If that chapter was three pages it would have beena great start. But it definitley got me excited about ...
Aw....amazing! The story overall was just great! I couldn't help myself from continuing to read it. The characters were extremely believable in the way that they talked, and you really did use excellent dialogue to present them. One clear mistake I found in reading this was: You won’t get out of this. hollow if you don’t start talking.” I'm not sure if the period should be there. I also noticed that you had many quotation marks in the wrong areas, which made it hard to see where the talking e...
That was excellent! Gosh, and definitley sad. You are definitley a strong first person writer from what I gathered. And I loved how you tied in things from the begining of the story and brought them to the end for a great conclusion. Like, at first I had no idea how the story would turn out in the begining, but then it turned out to be one of those heart-warming stories that i really like. I think the saracasim actually made things a little confusing, though it is the character. And there was...
Wow...I should have taken your note about the faint-hearted seriously. Well....okay. So Gabrielle definitley had a lot of character, an almost mentallly exited charcter. This kept the story going, considering there was only one character. But since there is only one character, you might want to consider adding a little bit more characters. If this is to be a stage play, I don't think people want to just see a character explaining all this. You could try to have scenes occurring while she spea...
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