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AGE:
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LOC: Ventura, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 25
LOC: Ventura, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 25
Writing for pain and pleasure is on hold indefinitely.
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We live on faulty earth in paper houses, subsist on the crumbs of a stale paradigm and pretend to be grounded. California has a cruel streak about 800 miles long and if you’re not careful she’ll turn you upside down. Today there was a question mark in the sky, I saw it with my own eyes. When it finally dispersed like the last wisp of foam in my coffee, a light rain fell. But, it never rains in California, it only pours. We live in extreme times in the extreme west. We h...
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It was two hours past dusk when the city surrendered to a merciless rainfall. Flickering neon mocked those who equate evenings indoors to sensory deprivation. The same people who take mornings with a beer chaser and leave the heat of the day to snakes. That song about California is true; it never rains, but oh how it pours. Southern California is the spoiled offspring of the American Dream and occasionally deserving of a good spanking, but five days of continuous, punishing showers was...
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plasmatic sacral stirrings spit scarlet obscenities graffiti the tile with exclamation points of revelation pelvic declaration of power and despair bless the fair, young pussies that bleed pink and taste like cherry cola Eve was one them the blood thickens with age and slaves to the cycle curse the moon and the empty womb Nipples are for babies lovers are for losing the contents of the uterus not always of our choosing
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Every six months or so, my father’s wife alerts me to the impending arrival of a large box. The box will contain artifacts from my past lives, carefully excavated from the second story of the house where I spent my youth. The house where my mother died. Rusted tins of bobby pins Broken jewelry Matchbooks Gift-with-purchase toiletry bags Coins cemented together with decades old chewing gum Every item has immunity from her trash cans, but most find their way into mine. So, when the baby book ar...
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Ashes to Ashes My mother ironed our underwear. The cigarette balanced at the edge of her tightrope lip defied gravity. Burnt orange ashtray danced atop the ironing board like an open grave, primed for another skeleton to fall. "Welcome to the Chinese Laundry," she'd say, laughing on the outside. Surrounded on all sides, by hanging garments which doubled for wallpaper. In the 70s our clothes matched our kitchen. We wore avocado and ate dead animals. Later, from her living room deathbed morphin...
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Wondering when the shitstorm will end but I like the use of unlikely subject matter for this genre.
Brava, Treatsa! It's STRONG. I think wall mounted might need a hyphen. Congrats on seeing a piece all the way through like you did.
"As I approached..." remove colon. Of course the stare is in their eyes. Maybe a slight adjustment to that thought. (Ms. Spleen, lol) Inserting the word "their" between "removed" and "walnut scraps" will clarify that sentence just fine. Remove colon between "mother" and "about scars" (Mrs. Humpstain, lmao) Maybe a different word for younglings. Schoolgirls? "I considered their too skimpy..." and smiled. "Brought out" weakens. ,shrugging as if helpless rather than a new sentence. Great story. ...
You're definitely at your best with dialogue and male/female relationships. Does this pick up where the last chapter you posted left off? After the big hurricane then this? If so I didn't notice a transition. Like the other reviewer said, there were some brilliant moments: the cellular memory/labor part and the quiet moments when she was sleeping. You're giving Worth much dimension which keeps things interesting. We see a different side to him. The vulnerable almost people pleasing Worth make...
I'll be honest. I did not get the pregnancy part on first or even second read. That is my fault though. I can be slow. I got distracted by all the nudity. References to genitalia titillate me. Second sentence: For some reason I'd prefer it to read: Justine wore nothing. Darren wore socks. Great imagery and original description throughout. Her tits were vigilant is brilliant. I'm fascinated by their matter of factness, eating breakfast etc. while nude. Using breakfast to frame this uncomfortab...
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