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AGE:
43
LOC: Batesville, AR
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 17
LOC: Batesville, AR
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 17
Just another poet writing because it is the nature of us beasts. Either we write it down or we lose the thought completely. momsgirl2
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Darkness Is Nigh As the world lies sleeping, and darkness is nigh. A lone star sparkles brightly, in the dark winter sky. Clouds unfold and breezes blow, deeo blankets of snow cover each bed. where all of the world's sould, lie down their weary heads. the world sleeps...yet God os awake, and loks down in silence, eyes aglow. He stands..a silent sentinel watching, but how many of the sleeping know? He stands in the unlit stars and weeps, for His lost children, lying asleep. momsgirl2
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I really like the first three lines..You went from "I" to Cory,He, and his,,I think it would read better if you continued it in the "I" tense..also in the last lines it might sound better with the air was pure etc..God bless..momsgirl2
This is written well. Trhe one thing I notices is that it seems to reflect or relat to God..so I would have used Father instead of Mother.this was from a very interesting thought..Good going..momsgirl2
Is it so bad you won't write down at least a synopsis on here for a decent review?
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