mstreet's profile
AGE:
40
LOC: Moultonborough, NH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 23
LOC: Moultonborough, NH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 23
I have had a passion for writing since forever. Although I just came back to it recently. I enjoy fiction, but I also write things from the heart – and some times other parts of the body :) I am a thirty something woman living in the northeast and find that I can experience many different emotions at any given moment. I guess it is a form of therapy to write what you are really feeling. Go forth and enjoy…
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It has been fourteen years, five months and a bunch of days since we first saw each other. We met in such a crazy way; your brother dating my sister. They got married. I was the Maid of Honor, you the Best Man. Do you realize that is the only time when our bodies came together? I felt so content in your arms. But I felt your hesitation because he was watching. Since the moment I saw you; beautiful eyes, exquisite body and dark mysterious looks, I knew I had fallen. Why did I have a boyfriend?...
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Chapter 3-City of Concrete Four weeks earlier, Jess walked into a store in downtown Boston called, “The Spy Guy.” Her jet black hair that reached almost down to her waist in a mass of curls was tightly secured in a severe bun. Large round sunglasses hid her aqua blue eyes and partially covered her face. Because of her beauty, many people remembered her, especially men. She did everything she could so that the sales person would find her to be unremarkable. She wore khaki pants, a beige turtle...
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Jess rubbed her hands over her face and let out a shaky sigh. “My God,” she thought. This time it had been so real. She swore she could feel the tender areas on her body where the police had thrown her into the back of the car. If she breathed in just so, she could smell the foul odor of urine that permeated the vehicle. Jess looked at her hands and could still feel them tingling from shooting the gun. Yet, laying in her bed, covered by a silken comforter and hearing Michael’s off-tune voice...
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Standing on opposite sides of the room Separated by feet; separated by miles My heart broken, my dreams faded And I am filled with sadness I am bold enough to look and catch your stare Beautiful intense eyes Eyes that I have known for years Friends; only friends My heart and body feel your gravitational pull With my eyes I beg, if not for a lifetime, just one night Tangled sheets, wet bodies, satisfying every need Instinctively I know it would be perfection Yet he chose her; the traditional l...
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She watched as he brought his car to a stop beside the curb, on a paved street, surrounded by concrete. On one side, there was a large, brown warehouse. Most of the windows were cracked and broken; some were missing completely. On the other side of the street was an empty lot surrounded by a chain link fence. It was obvious that this lot had been a place to call home for many who didn’t have a warm bed of their own. There was just enough of the fence that had been cut and lifted from its pla...
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Very sweet for a 14 year old's attempt at poetry. It is a bit predictable and sounds and awful lot like a song that was way before your time. I'd be careful about the line that reads, "I'll turn your frown upside-down." It is very cliche and could use something a bit more creative. All in all, you did a nice job and I think it is great that you put your work out on a site like Urbis. Keep up the good work!
You write very well and I will not critique your punctuation, etc. This is a very sad story because it deals with the question of how we deal with death. I, like you feel it is a very private time and don't want to listen to everyones' tears. However, I understand that they have no choice. Although you take the process to the scientific. You study how the body functions and fails and that sounds as if it makes it easier for you to remove the emotional aspect to grief. Again, this is a very sa...
Wow, very powerful stuff. Have you thought of trying to publish this in a teen magazine? Teen Vogue or People. Something along those lines. I ask because telling from a younger persons perspective who struggles with this daily might get through to young girls (and boys) who might be considering drastically changing their eating habits and heading down the road to anorexia. This is a really good piece of writing. Your flow works well. You keep the reader engaged throughout and there were no hi...
People care about cutting because you could end up killing yourself. This is so very sad. I wish you felt that someone cared or would listen. Depression is sad and, at your age, feels like the world is coming to an end. If this refers to your cutting or a friend, stop yourself or talk to your friend. Someone cares, you might not realize it but, someone does. You are too young to give up. This isn't a review, I realize, but I am concerned. I wish you well.
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