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AGE: 28
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: February 20

FIRST I will say I am fully equipped with a Bullshit Radar and a Crappiness Detector and they are relentlessly on guard. So good luck getting through.
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SECOND—Please, please Please PlEASE Please Please PLEASE please SOMEONE Invent a TEEN URBIS! A Forteen Year old Should NOT be telling Me How “ABSTRACT” My Poetry IS. Nor should I be exposed to some 18 year old’s cliche-wrought-ten attempt at expressing his or her FEEEELINGS. Teen URBIS, please! Get to work!
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That aside. I am a poet above all else. While I am relatively young, I’ve been writing seriously for a very long time and maybe that youth/experience gives me a kind of arrogance or cockiness, but if so then I will use the awareness of that to my advantage.  I do tend to know w…

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Poetry / Lineage
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13 Reviews   0 Comments
Lineage When I was twelve, Mom, spitting spite, we were bitter-bitten enemies at each other’s throat like Siamese twins hoping to bring the other death, but only feasting on our own famished hearts. A taste that was both murder and suicide. We were inversely related and I was so good at rebelling. Back-flipping through your demands to put my clothes away, not set the house afire, and get passing grades. You were all my life’s turmoil coiled into a spring-loaded fist, but like a gymnast that c...
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Poetry / Perjury
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11 Reviews   13 Comments
Perjury At twenty-two years old, the better part of me still believed writing a poem about my sixty-year-old mother, would chain-react to her waking the next morning with the words freshly branded into her breast, like a slew of scarlet letters. And though they would be so true God might have stitched them in the night with a blacksmith’s needle and flaming thread, she would nearly go into shock from the pain—of their “cruelty.” Like a smoke alarm, she would screech into my still and dreaming...
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Poetry / Strongmen
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12 Reviews   7 Comments
Strongmen This guy I work with “He’s a house,” as people who flit around his porch light say A giant like my brother, 6’6” and wide like a flag thick like a pillar Probably rips phones books like muscle-Ts just to kill time Too big for his own joints Walks like Frankenstein’s monster Works security here Would’ve made a great bully if it wasn’t for that goofy smile on his… Might not even shave yet Face of a little boy with a caterpillar tickling his cavernous hand Only this big kid is kind of ...
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Poetry / 35,000 and 1
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11 Reviews   15 Comments
Last week, under the harvest moon, the godfather of my long-departed sister went out to the desert and executed himself. I’m not sure what that makes him to me, but I am curious how many more baby-boomers are going out with a bang and if that’s an irony too uncouth to point out. This week the news sends tremors of an Asian earthquake around the world with tellings of flattened schools chalk-full of girls and “pancaked” buildings, which makes all those lives little more than bodies and blood ...
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Poetry / Child's Wisdom
Well...it DOESNT suck. Which is more than I can say for most of the stuff in this review queue lately :). But seriously, here's some advice on how you can bring it to another level. You have a feeling, that is clear and you did a good job describing that feeling as far as pulling it out of your mind like a shiny object and holding it up to the light for us to see. But that isn't enough. If you want this to be great, if you want me to sing with this, to resonate with it, then you Have to plant...
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
I will help you with some grammar stuff. It would take me too long to go through everything else. "I will let you over come me"--this doesn't make sense. Overcome is one word for starts, but that doesn't help the meaning. If you flipped it and said "come over me" it would make sense and sound decent but then you gotta worry about everybody thinking it's a double-entedre. But maybe your reaching for another term all together like "overwhelm" which would make perfect sense, though wouldn't be v...
Poetry / The Last Ball
So are you saying there was nobody in the WHOLE school who could've written somethin better? I feel sorry for your school. Your use of punctuation and line breaks is just bizarre. When you learned how to use semi-colons, you should've learned how to use colons as well. Your attempts at trying to parallel the whole "Step" thing come off very weak because there is nothing even unique about what you are saying. And the word "step" is rather weak anyway. You should've mixed it up more. But I hope...
Non-fiction / The Big Dipper
It is dry but I didn't find too many errors at least, or problem areas. The first one: "Understanding it's role" there shouldn't be an Apostrophe in that "its" 2nd paragraph after the list: Do you mean "WITH a telescope another star can be seen," cuz WITHOUT doesn't make much sense. "Scientifically speaking, if planning on viewing..." Sorry bud but you need a subject in that sentence. I realize you're trying to keep it objective/professional and not use 1st or 2nd person, but that doesn't mea...
Criticism / Sicko
Hey man, I'm glad you care and I'm glad the movie got you thinking. I'm pretty disappointed with the system in general, there's big problems with. All over the world really. I live in this country called Thailand for example, in southeast asia, and I have disease in my digestive system, I take herbal supplements for it so it's in "remission" and I am reasonably young, so there's nothing to be to scared about BUT the insurance I get through the school, possibly the best company in the country ...