I think the opening needs a little bit more to grab attention to make a publisher or an agent keep reading. I liked the story and would love to read more. good luck

It confuses me a little at I'm thinking about music with the line first beats then measures but then I start thinking about writing. after reading it for a second time I can see how the two can come together.

Beautifully done. I would only change one thing, Then as suddenly as it came and went I would put it instead of and. It lets the story flow as you originally intended it to

I liked it and thought it was very good the only thing I would change is insted of in that rain to in the rain

It painted a very good picture I liked it alot I can't think of any way to change it

It painted a pretty descriptive image. The flow is off I think choosing some differant words or differant spacing would benifit this piece.The one line I really had trouble with was his strong but not obsessed over body. I really didn't get what this line was for

I loved it you can feel how much he means to you check out your punctuation. Very lovely poem

I liked it for what it was a eulogy. Maybe you could have put a little bit more emotion into it but all in all I got a very nice picture of the man you were saying goodbye to.

I found this poem lacking in everything

I thought it was very entetaining, but I thought the word he was over used.