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AGE: 29
LOC: Baton Rouge, LA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 10
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Poetry / Untitled #7
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You're more than I expected and I stand corrected. Time and again new world's get erected. 'Cause you always change but you're always the same - confusing yet predictable - it's part of the game. Assume mine's the best or is it a test? trudgin' trhough it, in dure need of some rest. But whether I'm here or not you just won't stop - gonna keep goin' 'til the day that I drop. Through good times and strife, whether wrong or right, I call you by your God-given name : LIFE.
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When the day breaks and all is new and bright Inhale the freshness, embrace the light For it shines upon us all and we all glow Some sit in darkness and do not know That things in life don't always have to be bad And some things in life aren't meant to be had Acknowledge your imperfections, welcome affection And instead of regression, start progression Define- not defend, begin and not end Revise your words to correct the message you send Believe in yourself, put love before wealth Take care ...
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as i was reading i could clearly see the things you were describing. i really liked the decription of the sun setting; "miles fade with daylight". i wouldn't change anything about it. it reminds me of how i write when asked to describe something. Keep up the great work. your writing here leads me to believe that you have the potential to write stories and not just poetry...
Poetry / Destination
I liked this one....who knew that something so simple could be made to seem so complex? On e of my fave lines was "trapped and captive in rolling glass jars, a habitat on plastic and vinyl interior". I understand that. great description and word usage. I liked the fact that u kept my attention , leading me. i look forward to reading more of your work
Poetry / SEPTEMBER
this poem was easy for me to read and understand. i also like the comparisons of september to cooking/food. keep up the good work...
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