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AGE:
22
LOC: Australia
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 04
LOC: Australia
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 04
Currently an arts student at the University of the Sunshine Coast in Queensland, Australia. Studying a Bachelor of Communication, I have experienced narrative writing courses, history, literature, non-fiction literature, popular culture, editing, film and television, business marketing and advertising curriculum. Through this site I will be showcasing some early drafts of screenplays and short stories. Hoping to receive some constructive criticism as well as evolve as a writer and creator. I look forward to reading through current works on this site and giving my own thoughts and criticisms to others also. :-)
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“Damn it!” he pounded on the desk with an unnatural brute force. Bradley Tallwoods had been working hard all day inside his small red brick house on Terrence Street, in the small town of Bendigo. No one really knew much about Bradley as he kept to himself, mostly. He’d become an accountant after an episode of town murders in the late 1990s which were considered unsolved. He had become prime suspect and as a witness had identified him near the scene of one of t...
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“Dang it!” he pounded on the desk. Bradley Tallwoods had been working hard all day inside his small red brick house on Terrence Street, in the small town of Bendigo. No one really knew much about Bradley as he kept to himself, mostly. He’d become an accountant after an episode of town murders in the late 1990s which were considered unsolved. Only after he had become the prime suspect and only witness did the case come to a standstill as there was no evidence to convict him....
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Now I know how you must feel. Empty, driven, hollow. What do you think about when you’re on that exercise machine? Running, for the sake of running? Where does your mind drift too? What keeps your legs pounding, step after step? Is it out of pure anger or spite? Do you feel nothing? You deprive yourself of emotion, to get where? Where other people want you to be? Where you want to be? How hard is it to see your reflection in the mirror every day? To loathe the person you see. Disgusting...
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Oh to escape one label and be placed into another. To understand something we need it to be categorized. I love the overall tone you have developed through the narrative that was both ironic and satirical. And i love the work's self-referentiality and this sentence made me laugh out loud 'The whole universe is organized around a tight time-space continum—-much like emo apparel is tight.' Absolutely Fantastic.
I really enjoyed this piece. The rhyme and rhythm was perfect and your use of the descriptive language with anatomical names was great. This has to be my favourite line, both in pace, rhythm and rhyme: "That spins her convoluted webbed synapse Receptors of memory overload and collapse" Great work.
I wouldn't change a thing. This limerick has fantastic pace and timing and the subject is illuminating. I think this current situation of the government's stance on the health care system in the US is perfunctory and dated. I loved every minute of it, great job!
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