This is a good Cinquain. You could be more descriptive of the panther's movements, etc, but this is good for the children's category.

This is a great affirmation, even for adults! I think it is well written and children who read it will understand every word of it. Good work!

If your goal was to be felt, you have met that goal 100 percent. I could feel the emotion in this poem and it started pulling at my heart strings in the second paragraph with "In something magical and unseen. The meaning behind everything," because true love is definitely magical and unseen, and when you have it it brings true meaning to everything in your life. Here's wishing you true love, and I truly loved your poem. I only gave an 8 for best romance on urbis because this is only the first...

I like your story's premise here, but you need to show more emotion to capture your readers and keep them engrossed in your writing. Take this sentence: “It isn’t you who frightens me. I frighten myself by my reaction to you. I feel as if I was playing — as if WE were playing — with petrol and matches. Everything could blow up in my face.” I would rewrite this dialogue like this to get more emotion. "It isn't you that I'm frightened by. It's the way I respond to you that has me scared. (delet...

This is a great quote because so many people try to be like everyone else, and then some people by default pick up other people's habits, so a creative soul - one that is true to oneself - is rare. Great quote!

When this starts out I don't know where it is going, but I like the way it ends because anything can turn into a poem for a writer. Nice.

The poem had an OK flow, but the reader is left to wonder what is exactly going on on the road to lead these two youngsters to their death (and that may be the writers intention). Overall, nice write.

I especially like the way this song begins with a repeat of the words No one knows...It drawers the listener into the girl you are singing about and makes them want to know more about her. Overall, I can appreciate a beautiful love song and you have written one.

Good question. I rate a piece on whether I was touched by it, did I get a full understanding of what the author was attempting to convey. If after rereading the piece a second time I still don't understand what the point was that is when I will make a comment that the piece needs clarification.

I kept an open mind, and this poem actually puts you in the park with this woman and tells a vivid story. However, I am only able to see page one of the poem so I lack the ability to critique the entire poem. What I read so far is an excellent twist of words.