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AGE: 32
LOC: Myrtle Beach, SC
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 20

Students: I’m busy busy busy this summer with taking a writing class (yeah – more to teach to you ;), hanging with my boys, and of course enjoying our beautiful beach. I want to read and review your new stuff though….so shoot me a message and tell me when you have something up that’s new -

Remember – Creative WRiting Club meeting coming up on Saturday, July 25 at Barnes and Nobles from 10 – 12. Meet in coffee area (after all, you know how Mrs. N loves her coffee!)

Peace, love and writing!

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Non-fiction / Never Laugh
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My next kiss occured when I was fourteen. Tommy was the older brother of my then best friend, Monica. He was sixteen and had been brave enough to ask me out through his little sister. Despite my parents' rule that I couldn't date until I was sixteen, they relented and Tomm and I headed off for a grand adventure at the local skating rink, If I'm honest with myself, I have to admit that I don't remember anything about our time at te skating rink. All the excitement happened behind the big steel...
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Short Story / Icy Summer Kiss
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5 Reviews   7 Comments
I've always been a bad judge of character. My subconscious leads me towards people who are inherently bad for me. Sometimes, I wonder, does my inner mind have it in for me? Does it secretly revel in my suffering? My inner pull towards the “bad boys” has always existed. Always. When I was seven, one of my best friends in the whole world was Nathaniel. He was beautiful. Ever tan, with brown hair that was always cut a little too long. With a toss of his head, his hair would dangle o...
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Haiku/Senryu / In the rain
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13 Reviews   14 Comments
A hesitation. Waiting, with my heart pounding. Our disappointment.
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Addict 8
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        Cruelly, my presence had no affect on her. Her heels danced over my dropped glass as she made her way to the bar.          My eyes devoured her, drank her. Consumed every last inch of her. Charlotte lowered herself onto the stool next to mine. She swiveled the chair around as she waited for the bartender to make his way back to our end of the bar. Each circle her chair made sent waves of her scent crashing int...
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Inspiration often enters our lives from places we never expect. As a creative writing teacher at Forestbrook Middle School, it is my job to inspire young people everyday. I find joy in stirring young minds, and feel blessed to get paid for it! Each student who enters my classroom touches my heart in a different way. Some have taught me patience, some have shown me how to laugh at my worst day, and some have created memories that will last a lifetime. This past quarter, I met a student who com...
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I like it. I'm not sure about the transistion between lyrical and prose. I think the change as it is right now is a little abrupt. What throws it off is that the prose is still very poetic - I think you should make it a little more narrative like - possible note the transistion through italics (use italics for all narrations) I like the repetitiveness. I think you need to look at your punctuation again though. For example: You gave me everything I know, She's now a spirit, know. She's keep in...
Non-fiction / I Don't Remember
cute! I will always remember that day - especially the way you retell it and capture her voice perfectly. Couple of specifics: knowing her affadavit, you could tell by her face, and looked that crowd in the eyes and screamed, actaully that sentence is really long - I might consider reworking it - you could add in details about how she looked - or how the court room looked to help break it up. I'd use cheaters can win versus cheating - cause technically cheating can't win - but cheaters can. I...
The first thing that jumped off the screen at me is that you only used end punctuation in the 1st, 8th and 9th stanzas. While this may be on purpose, I'd like to see some consitancy on the punctuation. just find you out first and I would - this line throws me off a little - I'm not sure if you meant it to be just to find you out....or if I'm missing something. Adding "to" would make it make more sense though. I love the continuance of the lines - it drives me crazy when poets feel the need to...
Poetry / Surrounded
line 3: by not my "What happened, love It surrounds, but won’t touch me," - these lines are confusing simply because of punctuation....i think What happened? Love, it surrounds, but won't touch me. is a clearer way....but there are other ways - you need to separate the way you mean it , right now on first read it comes across as what happened love? Maybe that's how you meant it though??? I love the last lines - and I firmly believe you will get your happy ending. Overall I really love it - bu...
Thanks for emailing me that you had new stuff up! Your little "about me" brought a smile to my face too. Specifics: 4. doesn't 4. reads awkward - should it be Overthinking the one thing that doesn't need to be though about? Punctuation I personally think you got a little comma heavy here - but in poetry so much of punctuation rules are thrown out the window. I think the lines that use repetition to start (thinking and not lines) sould end with dashes - indicating a pause - without the constan...