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AGE: 23
LOC: Goodyear, AZ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 08

I write from what I see. I am a big people watcher and peoples emotions to me, feel often like my own. One of my friends said i am like a jumper, but a jumper into someone else’s emotions. I then come back and paint a picture with words of what was going on.

Writing is a release and can be so honest if we let it come out.

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Flash Fiction / I need...
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********* It just wasn’t merely enough. He flipped her over. His hand rested on the small of her back. Candlelight reflected off her pure, untouched, milky white skin. The bareness of it fascinated him. A blank canvas in which his imagination ran wild with. Her light honey colored hair fell delicately over her toned shoulders. It’s silkiness tempting him to grab it. He took a brief moment before he reentered her. His hands ran over her. Playing with the round curvature of her butt. It was per...
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I'm the fever, That burns you, flushing your beautiful cheeks. I am the chain, That binds you, your heart is mine. I am the feather, That runs over you, delicate and soft. I am the whisper, That tells you of passion and desire. I am the corset, That bind and hides all you want. I am the boots knee high and heeled, That walk to the beat of your heart. I am the lips, That you want to nibble and kiss. I am the ice, That sends shivers down your back. I am chocolate, That you drip across my belly ...
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I'm the fever, That burns you, flushing your beautiful cheeks. I am the chain, That binds you, your heart is mine. I am the feather, That runs over you, delicate and soft. I am the whisper, That tells you of passion and desire. I am the corset, That bind and hides all you want. I am the boots knee high and heeled, That walk to the beat of your heart. I am the lips, That you want to nibble and kiss. I am the ice, That sends shivers down your back. I am chocolate, That you drip across my belly ...
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Flash Fiction / Life At A Funeral
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Life at a Funeral ~ She lay there in the cold, alone. Silence filled her ears. Memories violently came to her. She wasn't sure if her memories she saw now were those she truly remembered or those she had pieced together from stories and pictures... either way, they were vivid. Glances of her childhood so early and innocent. She remembers Tiger, her childhood cat. Poison Ivy and finding it. Her daddy smiling at her as he strapped her in for an afternoon ride. Her mind hurled into her memories ...
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Flash Fiction / Silent Help Wanted Ad
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It was one of those days. She unlocked the door with the slow and heavy burden of a long day. She dropped her keys on the telephone table, started up the steps loosing one shoe at time. She undid her coat and let it slide to the floor on the landing. She striped her jeans in front of the kitchen and pulled her sweater off in the hall. She reached behind her and unclasped the bra that left an "x" pattern. Pulling her hair up in an unfashionable ponytail she took off the last bit of clothing. H...
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I love how much detail you already have with the thirty words. For addtion though I could see many areas of expansion. Such as - The windows had bars: no escape. _ This line stood out for me. As the feeling of being trapped and faced with burning to death causes so much emotion you could write about. The smell of the smoke, the warmth of the fire. The panic, then the relization of acceptance with your last line and whiskey. And reclining... how does the chair feel? Why is it special occasion ...
I highly enjoyed your story. As I woman I relate to this. I feel often that women are meant to "play" a certain good girl role when I comes to sex. I feel many of us desire and want much much more but settle for less... _ After it's done, she'll shake it off like a daydream that has detained her long enough, straighten her skirt and return to the world that she has been pretending so carefully to belong to. _ You descirbe this beautifully. I would suggest punctuation on the last line - perhap...
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Flash Fiction / Neptune
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Flash Fiction / Trees Knees
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Poetry / The Food We Eat
I liked how serious this subject is and how you turned it into poetry. I enjoy reading about this in a different manner than what would be considered "normal". I love the ending as it is so true "Saving money is not wise When final bills are paid in lives." This is an awesome write ... ! Thank you for sharing.
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