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AGE:
22
LOC: Missoula, MT
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 20
LOC: Missoula, MT
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 20
Hey yall, I am a junior in college and go to the University of Montana. Im Native American and I like to write poetry, be an actor, photographer and be creative with whatever I can. I would like to hear what you think of my writings. Thanks
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I could still smell the thick salt air as pelicans hovered above. Papa I said, as he stood staring off west. Is it our fault we had to leave home and everything we loved? He took me up into his arms soft, gentle and told me to look out into the big blue. If you’re still and look hard enough you can see our new home. I tried. When I looked into his eyes there was no doubt he could see it. Like a dream we were shook into this land of great promises with our hopes open wide.
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Heart Heart Aches, aches, aches, aches Left atrium, right atrium. Four chambers harmoniously. Blood in, blood out, blood in, blood out Right ventricle, left ventricle. Sucking, pumping, beating this love Straight through the veins main chain, always. A simple interior view, Is what I want to give to you. Beats, beats, beats, beats the drum inside Willing to hide my selfish pride, Scared to give this organ away. Take it, stretch it, shape it, shake it, But please, please, please, please don’t ...
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The Backdrop of heaven and hell surrounded my youth, offering paradise during the harshest times. Many people travel far and wide for beauty, that can’t be taken for granted. Traveling on a road that takes you all the way to the sun, makes you want to live forever, away from the rest of the world. Being places that aren’t confined by tall earth make me feel trapped. Living on a minute piece of land that was once so vast can make any person feel cheated. Then I see, looking around only to find...
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The poem is very reminiscent to the writer about a time during childhood perhaps. The rain represents renew, hope, rejuvenation. Only line I stumbled on was people find my behaviour strange, it dosent seem to fit the rest of the poem. I would say to cut the hmmmn as well.
You could sense the feeling you have for this woman in the poem. Poetry is a good way to vent and even if it is something mean spirited. The second stanza sounds like it is coming more from a kid and the following is the writer looking back. Keep writing those feelings.
Wow I wish I could snap my fingers for this one! It really gave that sense of somebody reading it at a jazz club for me. It had those words that made it roll off the tongue and had a musical quality to it as well. You should look up the poem "We Real Cool," it reminded me alot of this piece!
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