short and sweet. the rhyming factor seems to fit well and actually flows with the poem. rhyming is sometimes a hard thing to do, and when done, it is an action that needs to be properly distributed throughout all the lines, which you seemed to have done well. the only part that made me uneasy was near the end was the part about the window, after i read it twice it flowed better, because i knew how everything was flowing. until next time -nick

this was quite interesting none the less. the fact that the title ties in so well with each part of the piece pulled me in more than if it would have been some random title. being purely honest, for me, the title did it more than the work itself. that is not a bad thing either, that is what made me not get bored and made me want to finish more than two lines. i love how each different scenario is labeled on a different day. the fact that they were going backwards, did that mean anything, or w...