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LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 19
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 19
A 56 years old man born and raised in Liverpool, I have written four novels, 3 crime and one historical naval piece. Have completed six screenplays, though they’re never chiseled in granite and always editable. I’ve been commissioned to write 2 novels and options were taken on a couple of my screenplays, though as yet nothing has been published or made. I’ve been a seaman, a scrap dealer, car salesman, chatline owner, hawker(selling meat around London pubs) and I’ve drilled sisemic in the Sahara. Last year I took an old barge from Holland France where I spend all the free time I get writing. I been married a few times but now live happily in Brighton UK in a cheap rented flat with Barbara and have for 10 years. I’m looking for an agent t…
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Non creative people might imagine that creative people have more than half a day to read other people's work. How little do the greedy know or understand. I spend all of my time writing, what time's left to read? Sorry and goodbye Andy Fletcher
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This is a well written descriptive piece and certainly paints a picture of how the work would look if it was made.However, this is a very important part of screenwriting that that I struggle with; the fine line between directing and writing. Action sentences such as "Lorda looks sad all over; her face appears limp as she asks Kyna this question." or "Her face shows an expression of strength now, her mouth firm, eyes wide and looking straight ahead.." It's hard to omit such direction but if yo...
Is "Through the eye’s of a soldier I listen." deliberate poetic licence or just a mistake. It's a very black poem offering nothing in the way of redemtion or hope but it's got a definite unnavoidable truth about it. Tough reading but glaringly honest.
The script comes accross as a piece of extremely realistic stream of conciousness writing. A wholly believable voice. A great concept as a production because it involves very little in the way of scenery or set. I believe it will be an even greater concept if you do go on to develop those other characters in the same piece. This would give the audience a deep insight into every character's true feelings and motivation. If the characters all came together and played out some common scenes, we ...
It's a fast read, the story seems to come in torrents. Just an idea but maybe it could benefit from a little slowing down by the use of the kind of descriptions that might place me as the reader right in the middle of the story. Descrpitions involing the senses of touch and smell might go some way towards doing this. The narrative could stand a lot of slowing down and still be a fast easy and interesting read. Your writing seems similar to mine in the way you don't linger on falling leaves or...
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I've often considered heavy use of dialogue such as yours here. I've often wondered could it work and never really been wholly convinced until reading this excert. I am now completely convinced and might get a bit heavier on dialogue in my own pieces. It really does work, Iyou've shown me exactly how to do it, so thanks
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