I have never read a 'literary' magazine. Those two words don't even belong in the same sentence as far as I'm concerned. "Platonicity" while silly, certainly strikes my fancy for a 10 penny word. On the other hand, I have read this poem 6 times and still have no idea what concept you are trying to convey besides "hobos like booze, people like passion, such is life". Since I haven't read any of your other work I can't comment on how publishable this piece would be in a book of your own writing...

10 for subject matter only. Also on the last line I believe you meant "hearts of hate" rather than "heart's of hate".

I'm impressed. Again. The only thing I can see to harp on is minor at it's worst. Quite simply, a couple of lines don't scan!! When I read this out loud "A man is more than the sum of his parts / When the calculations are done; at the last / Things more ethereal than flesh and bone / Reveal the ore from which his soul was cast" the last line feels a syllable short. But with this one: "Pig iron for some; and gold for a few / It seems--that most men are alloys--I guess / But those made of steel...

You have piqued my curiosity, sir or madam! The only thing I can harp on is that it wasn't entirely clear what the glowing gift was on page 2. Which is totally forgivable, however, if this is going to be a full length novel. Post more!

The only thing I see is on page three: "...Jack Hemingway. I still hate name." You do an incredible job, in just ten pages, of pulling the reader kicking and screaming into your world. I particularly enjoyed the exploration of Nadine's smoking vis a vis "...room full of cancer patients...". It just struck me as a particularly honest passage; something you have witnessed first hand perhaps. Bottom line? I would love to read more of this! 10's :)

I've read this three times now and can find nothing to harp on. You totally got me with the ending, man. I'm still grinning! :) Thanks for a great piece. 10's!

This is somewhat reminiscent of some Cummings work with the vulgar, maybe even brutal, climax. I don't really see how "Mexican-Catholic" and "steel-worker father" serve the story, especially considering the word limit, but maybe it has some special meaning to you. Nor do I know about "best drabble" as this is the first piece I have ever read that followed this format. But all things considered, 10's. This is beautiful - no, poetic - in it's elegance and efficiency. By "sextuplet bastards" I w...

I love this story, I have loved it since the first time I read it. It's by far the most revealing of your stories. Maybe that's why it touches me so deeply. The feeling of mass confusion on the part of the authorities lends to the credibility of the setting. The only things I can nitpick on are technical, to say the least. I almost feel bad critiquing a piece of work with so much gut-wrenching effort poured into it. But if that's what it takes to get your work published, or at least polished...