perfectlypep's profile
AGE:
43
LOC: Atlanta, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 20
LOC: Atlanta, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 20
I am a Philadelphia native, been in Atlanta 6 years, and still haven’t seen most of it. I work for a major hospitality company & I stay on the road constantly! In between I’m working on my 1st novel – “The Shauna Chronicles” and loving life!
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Love is real pretty And romance is attractive Words come easily And drape softly there. But while you wax poetic Things prophetic Ooze eerily to the front Of our collective consciousness. World destruction Crime and corruption Three letters cry Generations slowly die Don't you know it Mister Poet? Well - write a poem About that. A voice for the masses And all we ask is That you bring truth In your lyrics Sound the call In the stillness You hint at revolution But no solutions Ignite within you...
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I was nervous. It was my first time doing something like this and I was nervous. I had only been dancing at the Crystal Palace for about a month. The money that I got from pole dancing was good, but you see, my car broke down last week. That required an emergency influx of funds as that’s the only way I have to get back and forth to school. You see I’m a graduate student at Norfolk State. After hearing my tale of woe, one of the other dancers was nice enough to let me in on how I could make s...
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Thank you for exposing me to something new - I really enjoyed it. This is the first time i've had to do a little research to be able to appreciate an artistic work. As a compliment piece to Ginsberg's orginal piece? It works. The phrasing and thought process beautifully imitates the orginal work yet its more current social references give it a flavor of its own. Only one line slightly threw me: "I am not gay Ginsberg but I would f*ck you in the ass if we were in Morocco – you and I. I’m not s...
You definately have a way with words. The reader develops an instant affinity for the main character - for me it was the humble, "aw shucks" manner in which he was conveyed. He had me intersted in his story from the lines: "It’s a story that might tell you a little bit about my dad. It might tell you something about me too. Or maybe it won’t tell you anything – I don’t know. All I know is that this is a story that I want to share with you." The story is very tightly constructed and well writt...
Wow. Im still trying to proces how i feel about this story. So beautiful, but so dark. I find it intersting that you orginally constructed this as a story for your son. He must be an amazing child to be able to process the meanings here. You posess an incredible mastery of wording. Each word pick fits the enmotion you are trying to covey. Even though discord is prevalent through out the story due to the "war" between the tribes, the piece still has a very peaceful quality. The story did get a...
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Question: Are you SURE this was intended to be a poem? It read more like a song to me. Believe it or not I could actually hear it in my head (smile). The construction of this was very intersting. In the begining the wording is very consise and brief. A laser focus almost. But then your wording shifts to almost a prose/songlike quality. I think that is what made me believe that this was meant to be a song. Your first stanza sounds like the chorus, the rest like lyrics, and the "two liners" lik...
What an interesting story. My intial reaction compelled me to feel compassion for the main character. I saw her as one who just wanted to fit in. Of course as the story progressed, her motivations became more sinister. There were a few "hiccups" in this story for me however. I got several crossed messages about the main characters motivations from the way the story was constructed. Towards the end the story suggests that she is an adoption agent and her actions drive business. However by the ...
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