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Most days I carry an extra twenty pounds on my back. In an old green knapsack with a widening hole in the corner and a broken zipper in front. The baggage of the perpetual student. I carry books and clothes. Music and lunches. Fragments of a life spent in perpetual motion. When I tire I set my burden down. Would that it were that easy to set aside my personal baggage. Emotional wounds never healed. Fears never overcome. Regrets never forgotten. Anger never vented. Guilt never confessed. Long...
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Great images. I'm not sure how the title relates to (or inspired) the poem. I need to break out my dictionary and look up the word 'knavish'. My favorite lines are: "your wasting away every time they breathe the pixels the tiny squares that balance your being scattering to the floor do they reach for the broom? of course not!" NOTE: "your" should be "you're"
What a great idea!!! A story in poems. I love it!!! I really feel connected to Henry. I feel his loss and pain and numbness. I'm worried about his dad. What's going to happen to him? And I want to know what's in the attic! Keep writing!
Very powerful poem. I can picture the willow very clearly in my head. It's almost as if I have seen it before. I like the interchange back and forth between the willow and the girl. I'm still not sure what the girl is afraid of - I will have to ponder this poem some more! I can't wait to read the next one! NOTE: "to strong" should be "too strong"
The writing was very descriptive, but I don't like the one paragraph format. It made all of the ideas run together and is confusing to the reader. I was left wanting some clarification - what was understood? This is good - I want to read more! You probably shouldn't use "It was almost as if" twice in the beginning. Keep writing!
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