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God bless your Gothic, bleeding heart! You have a good sense of continuity and a pleasant style of prose, which is slightly reminiscent of Poe and Mary Shelley in its' imagery and morbid, fatalistic romanticism. The theme is worn and beaten from over exposure. Your talent is rough, wanting focused design. Your gift is your rhythm that is free from rhyme. An approach to less explored thematic terrain would provide a worthy challenge for your poetic potential.

You've got the structural form, but I found it wanting for more creative intensity. Short but sweet. It doesn't pack a punch, but it's packed with sincerity and love. I don't believe you can go wrong with that.

you have a knack for creating vivid abstractions of emotion. However, they might gain more resonance were you to reduce the amount of different abstractions depicting the same event. It's easy to lose a reader when you opt for being lengthy. I like poems with at least a 3 stage experience. Not limited to, but, generally, composed with a beginning, a middle, and an end. I felt like your poem was like one big middle, with no beginning, and no end. The more you write, read, revise and review poe...

Your words have affected me so profoundly that I can't keep the tears from rolling down my face as I type. So many years I have seen what you say. So few are the souls I have known who will bear the humility. Your poem gave me: joy, sadness, empathy, renewed hope, bewilderment, envy, humble pie, respect, admiration, shock treatment, inspiration, motivation, encouragement, validation, completion, wonder, salvation, belonging, strength, rest, passion, pause, dis-belief, surrender, acceptance, e...