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AGE:
29
LOC: Wickliffe, OH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 29
LOC: Wickliffe, OH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 29
I am a jeweler by day and a romance writer by night. I play with all sorts of sub-genres, but I always go back to contemporary or timetravel. Not sure why. Guess it’s what I don’t COMPLETELY suck at.
I have enjoyed writing since my elementary school days. My classmates would always get ticked at me cuz the teacher would have us write a three page essay or something, and mine would come out more like ten. Once I get going, I can’t stop.
I picked writing back up seriously about four years ago. I have major issues like mixing past and present tense, punctuation during dialogue and as well as finishing a novel. I have only completed one. It is sad because while I have a lot to learn, I know my potential is there. I have come leaps an…
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He hadn’t bothered to leave a note. There was no one to read it except for his cousin, and Christian would understand. Hunter Caldwell was tired of this miserable, lonely existence otherwise known as his life. It was a chore just to see himself through the day; to wake up in the morning and drag himself out of bed, to ignore people’s gawking as he got his morning coffee at the convenience store, to withstand eight hours of drudgery each and every day with coworkers who wouldn’t look him in t...
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Prologue “How are you enjoying your birthday celebration?” Gannon Marsdon asked his little sister as he escorted her through the ballroom doors that led out onto the moon-and-lantern-lit gardens outside their home. Most of the guests had already begun to filter outside in anticipation of the last entertainment of the evening, which now remained secret only to the guest of honor. “There are a lot of people I do not know,” Bella whispered uneasily as she was wont to do on such occasions. “But i...
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Very well thought out and very well written. I like the way you got in Celice's head. I didn't really see a lot of errors, but here are a few sentences that were awkward and didn't really work for me: So she couldn’t understand as to why meeting Gabriel all this had changed. (Need to revamp or at the very least add a comma) So why had she got (gotten)the urge of potentiality? (Whole sentence is awkward, and I could be wrong, but it potentiality really a word?) Otherwise, looks great. I can't ...
I have to say that this is some of the first poetry/lyrics I have read on here that I truly enjoyed. You choice of words is fantastic. Unexpected and melodic, suprsising. There were several lines, espcially in the last two peoms that I had to stop and read it over again because they were so interesting and I had to unravel them. I love something that makes you think. Most of all, your style is reminiscent of Chris Cornell - beautiful phrases that you may not understand the first time you read...
I hate to say this, but I did not like this query letter at all. You went from downing yourself at the beginning, to showing off with lots of long words, back to downing yourself again at the end. I did not finish High School. (Who cares of you do not finish high school! Does that make you any less of a poet? If you are good, you are good. End of story. Never EVER down yourself when you are trying to SELL yourself. If you feel you are unworthy, then they will too! PLEASE, take this out!) I tr...
All in all, I liked this piece. The diolague overall was pretty strong. While I have not read the rest, I think I know where you are going with this and it is a great concept. Here are some things I noticed: Well Levi, welcome to Stasis, I do suggest to visit the church they are particularly good at welcoming newcomers and can even help you find your way around.” (This is a run-on) of those still attached to their skin or those with skin still attached to them (I loved this line) I noticed i...
I liked some parts of this, but others were lacking. While abruptness is what I am sure you were looking for to punctuate a piece to further illustrate the angst, it really didn't work for me, and a lot did not make sense. I did however like the "suprise" - I read the first few lines and think, ah, a cliched poem about flowers, and then get to "sweaty smell, destroys relationhips." It jolted me, and I liked that. However, that being said, it seemed a bit too "woman=good, man+bad" for me. But ...
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