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AGE:
20
LOC: Oneonta, AL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 01
LOC: Oneonta, AL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 01
Hey, I’m LK. I’ve been writing for seven years and still haven’t gotten close to perfecting it. I’m currently attending college majoring in English education but am deliberating on changing my major to some sort of film studies. I’ve gotten a few awards for poetry, but deep down inside, I hate poetry. I like a wide range of literature but I mainly write young adult fiction and some sci-fi/fantasy fiction though I’m a little rusty at the latter.
I’m not on urbis to put people down about their writing. I’m mainly here to offer tips and very constructed criticism. And for my own work to just be seen..
Thanks!
LK
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First of all, I really liked the beginning of this piece. It was descriptive and I could easily make a picture of what the character was seeing. There were a few errors in spelling throughout, though not too much that I couldn't make out the words. Just make sure it's corrected. Something that I noticed was a repetitive use of commas. It's okay to break a sentence in half and make it two sentences with a continued thought. Like your sentence from the first paragraph: "The first was a woman ri...
It's so refreshing to read something on this site that isn't chop full of grammar and punctuation problems or words that the reader will not understand. I think you have a nice idea, but the structure of where you are going with your idea is a little strange to me. Because where I've begun on chapter nine, I can't really say how much I am being pulled in because this is clearly well into the story. The ending of each of the six parts leaves off with a cliffhanger, which became sort of redunda...
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