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Version 3
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So many promises I made to her, That mirrored face I see, Telling her I’ll be better, That I can be a better me, I promise her I’m fearless, I’ll no longer bow my head, I promise to resist the ruthlessness, Defiant, I’ll defend my ground instead, So many promises I made to her, And her beseeching tender eyes, All these promises I gave to her, Please don’t let them all be lies
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Version 1
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If I fill this page With my broken mind Spill out the words Upon these lines If I let it out If it finds release Will the pain subside Can I lose the grief If I pour goodbye with a careless pen Will it erase the love I find within If I let you go As tears trickle down Can I accept a peace In the life you’ve found Watch you moving on As I slowly drown Can I learn to fly Bring wings to sky Write my own goodbye If the ink can find The words I hide Can my mind let go And say goodbye
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Poetry / Inspired
Version 1
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I wake up with just one thought pervasive in my mind: I want to inspire him. I fell asleep when twilight met the morning and my waking dreams of him were still weaving their way into the core of my being; becoming permanent fixtures in my heart. Meeting this other part of me, completion, like a mirror projecting all the inner fears and longings that my heart has kept sheltered and shuttered like a possession; needing no light and deserving no attention. I have sheltered the heart of who I am,...
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Version 2
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Must have found my crazy Just couldn't stay away Reason how you come to me At the end of roughest days Promises I made to her Mirrored face I see I tell her I'll be better I can be a better me I tell her I'll be fearless I’ll no longer bow my head I’ll stand against ruthlessness Defiantly defend my ground instead Promises I made to her With beseeching tender eyes Promises I gave to her Don’t let them all be lies
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Version 1
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Oh heart, my heart Don’t break today Reason upon reason Please find your way Closing in, oh pain retreat Leave me now, as I near defeat Tears please stop Don’t tease these eyes Spill down the cheeks That believed the lies Hide away, please hide away Bury the pain away, oh please don’t cry Weak and feeling trapped inside Break away from this Leave it all behind Love I lose, I can’t deny This grip on me, oh how I try Broken yes, but they just can’t know Hidden inside, oh how it grows Losing you...
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Haiku/Senryu / Evening Coffee
I love this... I want to sip the moon while I'm warmed by the fire in my coffee. This is a lovely piece of work and let me wanting to sip the moon.
Poetry / Honesty Is A Lie
I really liked how this started and how this ended, but the structure of the middle kind of lost me. They just don't quite feel like their structure belongs in this poem, although I like the lines and the idea, I think they would serve the poem better if you stuck to the structure... I would love to see a revision of this that fits into the structure of the rest of the poem but I enjoyed reading it either way! What a rotten way to play nice, To play the role of honesty, When all the gods pray...
Poetry / I choose
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Poetry / Glass Mirrors
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Poetry / I shivered
I like how you used cold to show how life without god feels and how warmth comes from a life with god. There is a lot of meaning behind this, even if simply stated. There are a few extra words in there that break the mental flow of reading it in your mind... I shivered in the silent night, it seemed a bitter dream, I prayed for God to show his hand, to bring a sunlight stream. He gave to me a brand new life, warmed me from within, now when winter stands close by, I know no cold, just him. Jus...
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